ISSUE 05 求拍死啊，太痛苦了

sinlon

I05
【claim】Government must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
【reason】It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
[rewite a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.]
WRITING:
The speaker claims that governments have to ensure their major cities to thrive through financial support in view of the primary role played by major cities in preserving and generating a nation’s cultural traditions. I strongly agree with the speaker that a nation’s major cities should get financial support supplied by its government in order to thrive, especially in the aspect of economic growth. However, I cannot agree that cities are the places where a nation’s cultural traditions are generated and preserved.

When it comes to a nation’s development, we naturally consider that its drives primarily come from cities in many respects, especially in the aspect of economic growth.From this point of view, cities need funds to supply more convenient facilities, such as office buildings, roads, subways, and so forth, to attract more investment. Moreover, it is necessary to get enough funds to improve dwelling environment in which their residents live. Besides, cities have to reserve a great amount of their taxes as educational and pension funds which are necessary to satisfy basic rights of their residents. Obviously, it is impossible for each city to provide so many funds to support these projects only by its own tax revenues. Only receiving financial support from their governments can ensure their lasting progress and development.

When it comes to a nation’s cultural traditions, however, I prefer to believe that cities play a significant role in disseminating a nation’s main cultural traditions, rather than in generating and preserving them. In the globalization era, cities offer a big stage for different cultures to communicate and interact with each other. Just consider an international city, for example, New York, where its people come from all over the world, consists of different languages, religions, mores and value systems. Possibly, it is just the diversity of its residents and cultures that is attracting more and more people to reach there.

On the other hand, I would support the proposal that governments should increase the degree of financial support to their rural areas. Compared to cities, rural areas are more likely to be the origin of a nation’s cultural traditions. Common sense tells us that, throughout recorded history, rural areas’ development are prior to cities’. Naturally, we can assert that it is not cities, but rather rural areas as the source of cultural traditions. Furthermore, cultural traditions in rural areas are relatively complete because of their undeveloped traffic systems and economy. Hence, in order to preserve these valued cultural traditions, its government must offer financial support to promote rural areas’ rapid development, so that their original cultures can attract more and more people to come there, and let the world know their particular cultural traditions.

Of course, both cities and rural areas should play a dispensable role in preserving and advertising cultural traditions. On the one hand, governments must let cities receive enough financial support they need to encourage their economic growth and spread their cultural traditions. On the other hand, rural areas’ development is the premise for the spread of cultural traditions in cities.

In sum, I fundamentally agree with the speaker that it is necessary for cities to receive governments’ financial support to thrive. However, only support cities’ development cannot reach the purpose of preserving a nation’s cultural traditions. Instead, they must offer financial support not only for their major cities, but also for their rural areas.

竹林中人

感觉你写的很好啊，语言内容都不错，没发现明显的问题。

sinlon

求各位多多提错误啊，感觉要准备不过来了