一篇AA，十天后考试 请各位评论

ashley0707

整篇请各位评价一下，从各方面都可以，谢谢！
The following appeared m the letters-to-the-editor section of a local newspaper.



"Muscle Monthly, a fitness magazine that regularly features pictures of bodybuilders using state-of-the-art exercise machines, frequently sells out, accordingto the owner of Skyview Newsstand. To help maximize fitness levels in our town's residents, we should, therefore, equip our new community fitness center with such machines."



Discuss how well reasoned.., etc.

Citing the fact that a fitness magazine that features pictures of bodybuilder using updated exercise machines often sells out at a newsstand in town, the author recommends equipping fitness center with such machines in order to maximize fitness levels of local residents. This argument is unconvincing because it suffers from three critical flaws.

In the first place, the argument does not mention why the fitness magazine sells out frequently. While the reason may be people’s favor for modernized exercise machines, the reason may be related to the bodybuilders in the pictures, who are all popular stars from latest TV fitness programme. And it is possible that people buy the magazine in order to keep up with up-to-date knowledge about fitness. Yet another possibility is that the good location of the newsstand has brought overall good sales including that of the fitness magazine.

Secondly, the author’s recommendation for equipping new community fitness center with advanced machines rests on the gratuitous assumption that people will come to the fitness center more often because of better machines. There is, however, no guarantee that this is the case. Nor does the author provide any evidence to support the assumption. If it turns out that people are too busy to go to fitness center to work out, then more advanced machines will be unlikely to increase patronage or fitness levels in town residents. Moreover, people do not have to go to the new community fitness center to have adequate exercises. Therefore, there exist more than one way to maximize fitness levels in the town’s residents. For example, more sports events can be held to increase exercise participants and to raise concern about health.

Third, the whole argument commits the fallacy of oversimplification. That a fitness magazine frequently sells out at a newsstand seems to have nothing to do with the recommendation that new community fitness center be equipped with advanced machines in order to help maximize local residents’ fitness levels. The author does not provide necessary connections between the two, thus making the argument very weak.

Based on the reasons I listed above, this argument is not compelling. To make the argument sound, the author can cite reliable evidence that the magazine sells out frequently as a result of people’s love for state-of-the-art exercise machines, that equipping fitness center with such machines will do such good as to maximize fitness levels in town residents.(408字，还好，40分钟加构思，很慢)

ashley0707

来得及啊，，现在天天写点，发现AA和AI都不到四百字，怎么办，要用模板吗
主要是issue不知道怎么用模板

rio

不好意思 来晚了，还来得及么？