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if your city will form a statue to celebrate a famous people who do you will choose.

                                                      The great Alexander

    Throughout the history, a lot of heroes appeared .they create the history and the world. If my city would form a statue to honor a famous one, my choice would be the great Alexander. During his brilliant short 30 years career, he built a large empire that connected with three continents. The biographical sketch his brief made his legend.

     He was outstanding among legions of his brothers when he was a boy and he became the student of Aristotle, he learnt much knowledge from his teacher including how to be a successful people and how to control the life of himself. At the age of 20, he became the emperor of the Macedonia.. Under his commander, his country grows strong and fast. With his surpassing military genius and great confidence, he almost win every fight, his enemies ran away when they heard about Alex’s name. In the home of his followings’ soul. His great exploit has become the immortal success and symbol .as the big country built, it strengthens the communication of the people in three continents. it was significant for the development of the future in his age.

     He should be remembered not only because of the founder of big country, but also because of his contribution to the literature and art. He founded a largest library at that time. He collected lots of books, scriptures after he succeeding to capture a nation .he did not destroy them, and he protected these precious product of spirit. He made these literature mixed, so people’s mind are more advanced and they knew themselves and the world more clear. and the library became the priceless treasury for our study to the history.

      His statue would represent his spirit and his exploit. so it will always encourage people in our time to chase their dream ,and never give up. No matter whom you are and what you are doing, you also could change the world and our future.

[此贴子已经被作者于2008-4-6 23:28:14编辑过]