TWE170,卡死30分钟写的作文，大牛使劲拍我吧，恳请修改！

kangyr

170 Groups or organizations are an
important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations
important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your
answer.



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Nowadays, Groups or organizations play an very important role in
people's lives. According to their own demands, people attend various
groups or organizations. I think by going to groups or organizations,
people can build their career, make friends and learn new things.



Being a member of the professional organization benefits people's
career development. For example, a nurse has to be registered in the
Nurse Association to get the permission of working as a nurse in
Canada. For other careers, such as high-tech, being a member of a
certain organization is not compulsory, but it is still better to go to
some groups regularly to get more information about the technology
developments or job opportunities.



Some people go to groups to learn some skills. Most of the neighborhood
groups go to this category. My mom used to go to the Chinese Women
Group when she was in Canada to learn English and decoration. After
several months, she began to decorate our apartment, that really made
our apartment a agreeable place to live. And she began to communicate
with other people, thus she doesn't feel lonely any longer.



People can always make friends no matter what kind of groups or
organizations they go. Through going to the groups or organizations
regularly, we get the valuable chance to meet people, share opinions,
and thus make friends.



All in all, groups and organizations provide us with great
opportunities to make our life richer and more interesting. We can
develop our career, learn new things and make more and more friends
from attending them.

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-3-11 4:04:32编辑过]

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以下是引用kangyr在2005-3-10 10:21:00的发言：

170 Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

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Nowadays, Groups or organizations play an very important role in people's lives. According to their own demands, people attend various groups or organizations. I think by going to groups or organizations, people can build their career, make friends and learn new things.

Being a member of the professional organization benefits people's career development. For example, a nurse has to be registered in the Nurse Association to get the permission of working as a nurse in Canada. For other careers, such as high-tech, being a member of a certain organization is not compulsory, but it is still better to go to some groups regularly to get more information about the technology developments or job opportunities.

Some people go to groups to learn some skills. Most of the neighborhood groups go to this category. My mom used to go to the Chinese Women Group when she was in Canada to learn English and decoration. After several months, she began to decorate our apartment, that really made our apartment a agreeable place to live. And she began to communicate with other people, thus she doesn't feel lonely any longer.

People can always make friends no matter what kind of groups or organizations they go. Through going to the groups or organizations regularly, we get the valuable chance to meet people, share opinions, and thus make friends.

All in all, groups and organizations provide us with great opportunities to make our life richer and more interesting. We can develop our career, learn new things and make more and more friends from attending them.

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joanrain

170 Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

Nowadays, groups and organizations play an important role in people's lives. People may choose to join in groups or organizations for many reasons. As far as I am concerned, I believe that joining in groups and organizations can help build one's career, broaden one's horizon, etc. hehe,我就改了这一段。还是烦躁ing

Being a member of the professional organization benefits people's career development. For example, a nurse has to be registered in the Nurse Association to get the permission of working as a nurse in Canada. For other careers, such as high-tech, being a member of a certain organization is not compulsory, but it is still better to go to some groups regularly to get more information about the technology developments or job opportunities.

Some people go to groups to learn some skills. Most of the neighborhood groups go to this category. My mom used to go to the Chinese Women Group when she was in Canada to learn English and decoration. After several months, she began to decorate our apartment, that really made our apartment a agreeable place to live. And she began to communicate with other people, thus she doesn't feel lonely any longer.

People can always make friends no matter what kind of groups or organizations they go. Through going to the groups or organizations regularly, we get the valuable chance to meet people, share opinions, and thus make friends.

All in all, groups and organizations provide us with great opportunities to make our life richer and more interesting. We can develop our career, learn new things and make more and more friends from attending them.

kangyr

二楼的，我的字数是259，请问合格吗？不是200到300吗？我也晕了！

嗯，是有低级错误，不过自己真是难看出来。不动手写都不知道自己水平有多差。



三楼的，谢谢修改，请接着改改吧！是我让你烦躁了吗？

joanrain

不是，我明天就要考试，所以很烦躁。咔咔

joanrain

嘿嘿，我刚刚随便写了一段，乱七八糟的，你凑合着看吧。你挑挑我的错再和你自己的对比一下，然后就易于发现自己的错误了哼哼，我也很想别人帮我改但是我没时间啦唉唉，555555哭一下先。

Nowadays, it is very common for one person to join into several groups or organizations. People make different choices among groups or organizations according to their respective preferences and backgrounds. Why do groups or organizations weigh that much to people today? Different people may render different opinions as regards their personal experiences. As far as I am concerned, I believe that people join groups or organizations to orient themselves and to have fun.

First of all, people orient themselves by entering into groups or organizations. In this modern society, it is easy for one to get lost in his life. Therefore, one may choose groups to get a more accurate definition of himself. For example, my aunt was totally confused about herself  after she retired and was very unhappy during a long time. Fortunately, several months later, she has found the community party, in which there are a lot of retired people. Almost everyday they play and study together, and through this way she has been much happier because she can see the life more clearly and feel that she is more valuable for the society now.

Secondly, fun is another important reason for people who join the groups or organizations. In this fast-pace era, people bear greater pressure in their career than ever before, so they must have some ways to get relaxation. Making friends with those who have the same interests with them is a good way, and it is quite easy for people to find these people in special groups such as Chess Group, Football club, etc. In fact, most of my friends are made in this way.

Admittedly, there are a lot of other good points of groups and organizations such as develop one's ability, build one's career, and so on. But as time is limited, I would prefer to list the above two reasons as the most significant ones. It is in groups and organizations that we define ourselves, and to have fun. Meanwhile, we make friends, develop our team spirit as well.

To sum up, there is every good reason for us to take part in some groups or organizations. They bring us happiness, and even point out the way we should head for in the future.

其实我的理由不是很好，呵呵，但是我也是卡时间写的，所以就想到什么写什么喽，字数还是满重要的。我把这篇写完只用了20分钟不到，后面修改了下，呵呵，据说高分has close relation to字数的。^_^

明天要考试，心里怕怕ing，烦躁ing，说话语无伦次，表见笑了。

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-3-11 11:01:43编辑过]