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Do you agree with the following statementthat patience is usually not a good strategy, we should take action now ratherthan later.

Many people treat patience as anindispensable factor before making any decisions, while others hold oppositeopinions that patience will not bring any benefits for decision-making, but actuallywaste precious time. For me, I believe that it is not wise to treat patience asa good strategy and we should take action as soon as possible.
First and foremost, the increasing pace ofmodern society is forcing everyone to keep alert all the time, under thiscircumstance, although we may just relax ourselves for only one moment, we willdefinitely find it hard to keep up with others. As the old saying goes, time ismoney, I do not mean that earning a lot of money is the final goal, but moneyhere equals success, and more and more people are gradually realizing that timerepresent success at present. So, if we choose to be patient before taking anyactions, in other words, if we choose to waste precious time, we will let greatopportunities flee, while others who have already made it clear that it isbetter to take actions now rather than later will catch the chances missed byus.
Apart from the reason above, in my opinion,patience sometimes means hesitation. In my country, old values regardhesitation as a fatal factor for decision-making, and according to a recent countrywide investigation, majority of people have at least one experience that theyfinally make wrong decisions thanks to being over patient. For instance, themost common situation in my country now is that almost everyone is regrettingfor not buying houses as more as possible in last few years, because of the skyrocketing prices of houses today, they set forth that being so patient leadthem to missing the best chance for making money in the house market. Concludingall these truths I can state that sometimes patience lead to failure.
Although I believe that patience will notbring any benefits for decision-making, I will not ignore some advantages ofbeing patient. Patience will definitely bring more time for us to think overthe chances or problems we are facing, and patience will decrease the risks wemay face during the process of decision-making.
To sum up, it is pivotal take actions nowrather than later, and I still insist that patience is usually not a goodstrategy.

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-- by 会员 fuzhengrui (2012/9/1 22:02:07)

看过了~~我的句子都太长了，而且我自己也发现很少用句号~一定改正~thank you~~~~

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没事没事~啊哈哈

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-- by 会员 fuzhengrui (2012/9/1 22:02:07)

看过了~~我的句子都太长了，而且我自己也发现很少用句号~一定改正~thank you~~~~

-- by 会员 zyq19911205 (2012/9/2 9:20:25)

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There is no doubt that education is one of the most significant foundation of every single country around the world now, and i also believe that education is increasingly accessible to every human beings. Here are my several reasons.

Firstly, in my opinion, education should not be defined as a superficial form of being educated at school, instead, i would rather describe education as a process of learning, no matter at school, or in a journey. For one aspect, as everyone knows, today's society is an information-based society, and i can definitely claim that internet has already concluded almost all of the intelligence we can imagine. In addition, internet is not restricted to scientists or wealthy people now, it is so common among entire world. So,  we are able to absorb knowledge through internet easily, such a convenient passage. For another aspect, as the old saying goes, you can learn everything from your journey. Being aid by such developed transportation systems, we can arrive any destinations without much effort. During journeys, i can barely imagine how much intelligence we will acquire that cannot be learned from books.

Although i emphasize that education should not be restricted to school, the importance of teaching and learning patterns at school can not be ignored. Recently i am informed that a great deal of governments around the world are providing free education projects for local students. Without the barriers of money, a number of children who in the past found it hard to get access to school will finally receive good education at school. No matter what, at least in my country, according to a recent investigation, almost all of the children who are at the age for school have receive the admission from formal schools.

All in all, although there are still some problems waiting to be solved, according to the evidence provided above, i can set forth that people are now easier to become educated than in the past.

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-- by 会员 fuzhengrui (2012/9/1 22:02:07)

又写了一篇~有时间的话再帮我改改吧~~
题目是people are now easier to become educated than in the past?

我在这篇里特意注意了句子长短，用了不少句号，你读读不知道行不行~
还有就是例子问题，不知道文章中的那个investigation算不算例子啊？
还有就是请教一下怎么在30分钟写出这么多内容啊，我发现30分钟根本不够~字数多少合适啊，我撑死也就是320 330左右~时间太紧

感激不尽~~

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围观头像~~哈哈  Despicable Me

-- by 会员 超级无敌小鹤鹤 (2012/9/2 9:55:01)

版主大驾光临~不介意帮小妹看看文章吧~toefl作文菜鸟一只~

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