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DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THE FOLLOWING STATEMENT?
THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD FOCUS MORE ON ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEMS AND LESS ON ECONOMIC DEVELOPMENT.

As time passes by , the economic development of different countries have changed a lot , the main honor can give the government’s plan and script for it .However, there also emerges with the environmental problems which seems a little bit more serious than other problems , the global warming ,the disappearance of habits of extincting animals and bad effects like these. As a whole fact general when balancing the benefits of two sides, I’d rather offer an agreement of the statement.

On the one hand, the environment problems relates to everyone living on the earth . Indeed, such life abounds in examples. The weather is becoming more and more strange contrast to the regular data, and especially in summer the hot weather in some places such as Africa and India is always the cause of the disease accompanying with the rising death rate. Moreover , not only human beings , but also animals meet with the same problems .Plenty of animals have to migrate to other places due to the nature change or human destroy.Talking about the bears on the North Pole, the pieces of ice are becoming less and they are facing with the problem that the hometown will disappear in one day.

By contrast , the economic problems seem to be made by people ,government ,and countries themselves and may be prevented and controlled actually. Just take the Wall Street for example, though the bailout was published out to save the bankrupt companies, in fact ,the financial crisis is dismissed as alarmism. If a company brankup, it can start from the beginning . If one economic problem occurred , a new policy will be published to save it, but ,if a natural avenues disappeard , a specide of animals died out ,they will never recover to the same situation before.

Furthermore , we must acknowledge that when the government put emphasis on the environment problems , to some reason ,it will also do good to the economical problems.

Consider, for example, tourism. A state with a good environment and plenty of species of plants and animals ,will surely attracts more visitors than that without good environment. Thus the tourism will bring money to the economics of the government.

To sum up, considering every living things not only human beings , the living condition of whom should be protected and not destroyed any longer. And the governments have the olibigation to protect the environment which will at the same time bring benefits for the economical problems.

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In twenty years, there will be less car in use than there today

Nowadays,there is a phenenomenone that global economics increases greatly and transmission are in great need.Obviously , accompanying with the trace of efficiency and speed , the opposite call for environmental protection and reduce of use of cars emerges. But such things in my view will not stop the pace of companies selling more cars and customers buying more cars. Thus, my opinion is in twenty years or even more years later, there will be more cars than there today.

First , with the demand for high efficiency of this society, people really put emphasis on speed and effects. And considering the more and more trade between different states and countries, the demand of cars won’t stop the pace of increasing. Just take the sales of tyres for example, both the sales and the repair needs for the tyre company increases during recent years. And more and more high techonoligy has been added to the design and the produce of cars, which make a well sense of use for the drivers. That is to say both the company of cars and buyers of cars are putting more intention on the experience of cars . thus driving will surely be not only in need but also in enjoyment in the future, which foresees a increase in the car numbers.

Secondly , though the global warming is a big issue ,which the big creater of it is the fuel that cars put out, and many people or organization call for the reduction of cars and carbon dioxide. The new kind of fuel such as fuel made from plants or electronic fuels are also being developed at the same time .For example , the fuel made from plants can counterpart the dioxide of the car put out by growing plants. That is to say, plants can absorb the carbon dioxide as nutrition when growing up.

To sum up, with the trend for high efficiency not ceasing, the need for cars will not decrease and more solution will also emerge to solve the problem present.

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Today people spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than the things they have to do.

Today , with the emergence of more and more technological interesting inventions and the process of globalization which provides more places and peoples to visit and communicate , the trend will truly happen that people spend more time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do. While some may arguing that people spent too much time that they ignore what they have to do to some extent, in my view the life’s meaning is enjoy the details of interesting things , thus there’s no denying that people can spend more time doing what they want to do.

Admittedly , doing what people have to do is an obligation of human. Taking our growing process for example, in childhood ,we needed to go to the kindergarten ,then primary schools and universities in the end， during which time we need to complete the assignments and listen to the tutor’s guide. It’s is a student’s obligation. Then we join in a company and finish ordinary tasks everyday , which is necessary for every fellows in a company no matter you want it or not. However , these obligation doesn’ matter，with the right for us to havethe personal enjoyment-doing things at the same time. Students like having sports and entering different hobby groups afterschool and fellows enjoy travelling in vacations and have party with colleagues in weekend. What I want to say is thatpeople do have obligation to finish the things they have to do , but it is also the condition that they attend the enjoyment things after they finish their obligation. In that situation , we have no right to argue that they spend too much time on it ,indeed ,it relies on the person’s freedom to choose individual way of relaxing.

Additionally , there’s no denying that the life’s meaning is enjoy the life itself , not one obligation after another. Just take the film ’Modern Time ’ for example, in the film, workers finish the job in a streamline just like a machine. But the director who recorded this phenomena is just an typical kind of people who enjoy the interest and the life .He isCharlie Chaplin。The man loved the film and saw and felt the details of everyday life with heart. He enjoyed the things he loved and left so many memorable achievements for us. It is just a contrast of the the people who love the enjoyment things and who do things they have to do everyday. There are many same example’s comtemporary , Stebven Jobs, Mark Bog . What I want to say is that, if is fun ,just do it follow your heart., sometimes new ideas come and no matter what the time limit is，happiness is from our heart, so don’t say too much time on it.

In conclusion ,people have rights to enjoy what they like, and In most cases they finish what they have to do ,then to enjoyment. Besides, the life’s mean is in do what you love to do and follow your heart. There’s no right to say that people spend to much time on the enjoyment