我写的第一篇,诚心请各位菜鸟,牛人提提意见

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大家帮我看看文章的结构,我觉的自己逻辑比较模糊.

开头段如何写一直写不太明白,比如说我先写了别人的观点,然后指出了自己的看法.然后把第二段作为让步段, 我总觉得和第一段有些重复.  至于每个段如何展开论点也没有清晰的思路,希望大家帮我分析下..

至于语法和用此实在太差了...

27 People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing.

 

 

How can we make a definition of “enjoyable things”? I think the word “enjoyable things” means something which is not difficult and people would have a strong interest in doing. Everyone would prefer to do things enjoyable and dislike the opposite things which are boring and difficult. From my perspective, however, sometimes doing things that people do not enjoy doing may be more valuable and in some situations we have no choice.

 

 

Admittedly, as doing things enjoyable, people may feel more comfortable and reach a high efficiency. That is why we always say that “interest is the best teacher for learning”. Looking for the successful people majoring in different fields such as industry, business, and so on, they all deeply loved what they have done. No interest, no motivity. Imagine the student who dislike chemistry, it will be a so terrible and boring task for them to recite the chemical term!

 

 

However, besides interest and happiness, there should be more factors and considerations that people takes into account in doing things. First of all, most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult and boring at the time become valuable lessons for the future. From that people may learn more experiences, knowledge, confidence, and so on. For instance, the NBA players such as Kobe and James inevitable are the adoration of many young people because they are so cool and own magic basketball skill on the court. However, to reach this level, they have to make a lot of repeatable, boring, and tired exercises everyday which never seems to enjoyable. Just these boring, difficult, and tedious exercises make them become the star but no you and me.

 

 

What is more, under some circumstances, people may have no choice to do something they do not enjoy doing. When you are finding a job, you must consider the salary you can get, the development of the job first, but not your interests. Material is the basis of everything. Some people would like to devote all their lives in the art they love which is earn-less. At this time they have to find a second-job to make a live although they do detest it in deep heart. In a word, people may no have too much choice on whether they should do things they do not enjoy doing.

 

 

In a word, although the enjoyable things looks more fascinating, interesting and easy, sometimes people may have no choice or they can learn more from the things they dislike to do. What is more, when you can treat them correctly and do them with your heart, you may find some new interests and get more advantages from these things.