９月１２号考了，作文希望求拍，谢谢了～

sunchong888

agrree or disagree"The most important education a person gets is the education had outside of the schools and classroom"

Education, in fact, is a key word in the 21th century. More and more people are eager in futher education in order to have a brightly furture. Consequently, people want to get education through various ways. And I think that the most education that a person get is outside of the school and calssroom.

The threshold reason why I agree with this is that a famous motto goes "Society is like a giant class, it gives you a great deal of crucial things." Indeed, the education is one of them. For instance, dealing with realitionship among the parterners, what should to know in the important ceremonial, socialize with business companies and etc. It is school that do not ever teach the people. Also, the students graduated from schools every year face all kinds of problems that cause them can not adopt the surroundings around them. Actually speaking, it is true that they are lack of the significant education when they were in schools. This phnomenon clearly demostrate that the importance of the knowledge studying in the scoeity.

To such a paramount reason, another must be added. That is the practice which the society ackonwledges people. On the country, what the schools teach us is only the theroys. However, society gives people the opportunities to practice which is the most crucial factor in people's career. Through exercises we really confront the diffculties in our life, we do not have to frustrate when we are in school which never teach is to build confidence.

Finally, there is a more practical reason that is the scoeity people understand the value of our life. It is what the school do not give the people. When I graduated from schooll in the begining I was confused what should I do in the numerous professions. Gradually, I do know the key thing with my life experince stimulating in the scociety. It encourages me to understand  the value of my life.

All in all, society is a book which people need to accquire in. It applies people with the confidence, valuable life and uesful things. 

yetemwok

Education, in fact, is a key word in the 21th century. More and more people are eager in futher education in order to have a brightly furture. Consequently, people want to get education through various ways. And I think that the most education that a person get is outside of the school and calssroom.

More remarkable than other terms in the twenty-first century is education, the catch word of our times. More and more people are eager for futher education in order to have a brighter future/tomorrow. Meanwhile/In the meantime, people can obtain knowledge through ways, such as formal education in schools, self-study with help of reference books, and accumulating savvy through practice. However/Nonetheless/Nevertheless, in a society changing as fast as ours, the bulk of education can only be done well outside of classroom.

remarks: mind your wording

mind your collocations

mind transitional word choice

try to find some good contemplates, read them and rewrite in your own language. if you have to sit the test, maybe it will be the most effective way

sunchong888

太感谢了，受益匪浅！！！！！

sunchong888

哪位高人给我再改改,谢了~顶一下

德克的猪

你可以先参考该版置顶的帖子里边的修改集合

然后我在iBT区有一个写作的帖子，你也可以参考一下

然后发现自己的一些问题，进行修改过后再发上来

我进行具体的修改

还有就是,先用word纠错