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07/1/19 ibt JJ

Do you agree or disagree: Most people prefer others making decision for them than making a decision for themselves.

 

 

There will be both advantages and disadvantages to allow others make decision for me.
But I would have to say that, if I face this issue, I definitely support this plan.
In the following discussion, I would like to analyze the problem and provide evidence
to support my viewpoint.

 
                

In the modern society, nothing is more important than efficiency. The past experiences witnesses and present many examples that making decision by myself cost me a great deal
time and energy. To make a decision, I need collecting the information, planning some project, and comparing which one is the best decision. However, if I allow others making decision for me, once I tell them my problem, they will offer the best decision to me.   

 

The correctness is another reason that I will demonstrate here. If I make the decision
only by myself, I might make mistakes in the unfamiliar situation. In now days, there
are many professional consultancy companies in various filed. They provide the accurate opinion to me. Never have I anxious about whether the decision correct or not, because
it is suggested by the professional.

As a proverb says, “Everything has two sides”, Making decision bye others also has drawbacks. The most significant problem would be that I could not obtain the fulfillment
by this way. Making a correct decision by myself, I earn not only the achievement but
also the fulfillment, because the achievement result form my decision not others.

 

 

As far as I concerned, although making the decision by myself would probably bring
more
            fulfillment, I still prefer
            others making decision for me. As it is well-known that
“Two heads are better than one”.The efficiency and the correctness are more important
than the fulfillment. If I made a wrong decision or a late decision, I might no chance to earn the fulfillment.

tomatohead

There will be both advantages and disadvantages to allow others make decision for me.But I would have to say that, if I face this issue, I definitely support this plan(what plan? Let others choose for you or you make a decision for yourself?).In the following discussion, I would like to analyze the problem and provide evidence
to support my viewpoint.(Why so many students here like repeating what they are going to do? You don't have to tell the readers what you are obviously going to analyze. Instead, you can make a very clear thesis staement.  "Before I make a decision, I would consider all aspects to be efficient and accurate." for your thesis statement.)

 
                

In the modern society, nothing is more important than efficiency. The past experiences witnesses and present many examples that making decision by myself cost me a great dealtime and energy. To make a decision, I need collecting the information, planning some project, and comparing which one is the best decision. However, if I allow others making(make) decision for me, once I tell them my problem, they will offer the best decision to me.   
                

 

 

The correctness is another reason that I will demonstrate here(that would support my standpoint). If I make the decision only by myself, I might make mistakes in the unfamiliar situation. In now days(Nowadays), thereare many professional consultancy companies in various filed(s). They provide the accurate opinion(not necessarily accurate, but "wise opinions) to me. Never have I anxious(anxious is adjective) about whether the decision correct or not, because
it is suggested by the professional. (I would be less anxious about the decision made because it is suggested by professionals.)

As a proverb says, “Everything has two sides”, Making decision bye others also has drawbacks. The most significant problem would be that I could not obtain the fulfillmenty this way(explain it clearly). Making a correct decision by myself, I earn not only the achievement but also the fulfillment(self-satisfaction), because the achievement result form(was earned by) my decision not (from)others.

 

 

As far as I concerned, although making the decision by myself would probably bring more
            fulfillment, I still prefer
            others making decision for me. As it is well-known that“Two heads are better than one”.The efficiency and the correctness are more important than the fulfillment. If I made(make) a wrong decision or a late decision, I might (have) no chance to earn the fulfillment.

RobertFLCL

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