[求助]twe 156 大家继续帮忙了，多谢

twe 156 you have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. which country would you like to visit? use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

Nowadays, traveling is becoming more and more popular among people, especially visiting some foreign countries. If given the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks, which country would you choose? Facing this question, different people will present different answers due to respective experiences and standpoints. Some choose to go to Russia; others may prefer to visit Canada. As far as I am concerned, I would like to go to Singapore. The reasons are listed as follows.

To begin with, people could appreciate the beautiful landscape in Singapore. Singapore lies in the tropical area and is called the garden country by the world, for almost 70 percent of its land is covered by various vegetations such as trees, flowers and grass. The streets are clean and the sky is blue. Orchid, the national flower of this country, could be seen in every corner of the streets or along roadsides. Moreover, a fabulous beach, Sentosa, welcomes tourists coming from other countries. Traveling in such a wonderful circumstance, people would definitely enjoy more happiness.

Next, the multi-national culture in Singapore is very attractive. In Singapore, there are not only Chinese, but also Indians and Malaysians. Each nation has its own distinctive cultural characters such as different customs, clothes and diets. By visiting Singapore, people surely could learn a lot of mysterious knowledge about different nations. For example, visitors could taste Indian’s curry food, try on Malaysian’s clothes and learn how to paint Chinese pictures. For travelers, such experience is really impressive and meaningful.

In addition, Singapore is a very safe country. Unlike some dangerous countries where the robbery is taken place at frequency, Singapore is one of the safest countries in the world. People visiting there need not to be afraid of being robbed, even coming back hotel in midnight alone. Else, Singaporeans are very kind and travelers could get their help conveniently to solve some difficulties.  Therefore, visitors could enjoy their travel much safer and happier.

Of course, there are many other countries that are beautiful and interesting such as France and England. But for the three reasons which have been discussed above, I would prefer to go to Singapore if I have the chance to visit a foreign country. Visiting Singapore will make people to appreciate the beautiful landscape, to learn multi-national culture and to enjoy more safety.

guoliwei的作文逵逵是要改的，不过，我怎么感觉你水平有退步呀？

而且不是题目难的问题，而是在遣词造句上。

To begin with, people could appreciate the beautiful landscape in Singapore. Singapore lies in the tropical area and is called the garden country by the world（gains the reputation as the garden country worldwide）, for almost 70 percent of its land is covered by various vegetations such as trees, flowers and grass. The streets are clean and the sky is blue. Orchid, the national flower of this country, could be seen in every corner of the streets or along roadsides. Moreover, a fabulous beach, Sentosa, welcomes tourists coming from other countries. Traveling in such a wonderful circumstance(这个词用的好像不怎么正点，environment比较合适), people would definitely enjoy more happiness.

Next, the multi-national culture in Singapore is very attractive. In Singapore, there are not only Chinese, but also Indians and Malaysians. Each nation has its own distinctive cultural characters such as different customs, clothes and diets. By visiting Singapore, people surely could learn a lot of mysterious knowledge about different nations. For example, visitors could taste Indian’s（不用所有格了吧） curry food, try on Malaysian’s clothes and learn how to paint Chinese pictures. For travelers, such experience is really impressive and meaningful.

In addition, Singapore is a very safe country. Unlike some dangerous countries where the robbery is taken place at frequency（没有把“频率高”，这个“高”表达出来，而且比较口语化，改成with a high frequency of robbery）, Singapore is one of the safest countries in the world. People visiting there need not to be afraid of being robbed, even coming back hotel in midnight alone. Else, Singaporeans are very kind and travelers could get their help conveniently to solve some difficulties.  Therefore, visitors could enjoy their travel much safer and happier.（和上一段重复，could用can就行了，语气还强一点）

句子有些简单，段落就容易显得不够精彩。我帮你改写一段你看看效果吧。

In addition，I think the safety should be a factor that cannot to be neglected. Unlike some other countries with a high frequency of robbery, Singapore provides a well-done social security. People visiting there can have a much safer journey, regardless of the threat of robbers. And the kind and hospitable Singaporeans will be a big help when you need somebody to give you a hand.  

kui ＧＧ您怎么总说大实话呢，俺就要考试了，给俺点鼓励和信心不好么。呵呵，开玩笑了

您提的建议很中肯，这篇文章只能说我写的时候感觉还比较顺，至于遣词造句方面确实还有很大的差距。ＫＵＩ　ＧＧ最后改写的那段很精彩，俺搬过来用了。

多谢ＧＧ，音乐和咖啡奉上

呵呵，想到这一点了，不过“江湖的血雨腥风拍打的了别人凭什么就拍打不了令狐冲呢？”，笑谈。

关键是要考试的时候发挥好。考试在即，祝愿你，虽然世界不因人们美好的愿望而转动，kuikui支持你。

谢谢咖啡和音乐，不过在生病，咖啡就不能喝了；有空去音乐区转转支持一下。

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