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后天考试~写了一综合 请大家批评````

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发表于 2012-9-6 14:15:11 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
本人写作能力极其有限~词汇量匮乏~作文总是写不完~
这篇是当时写完 粘贴下来又做了一些修改后的文章~
请大家看看是什么水平~后天考试,心里没底啊····有什么问题大家一定要指出来啊`````
According to the speaker in the listening material, the "let it burn "policy should not be abandoned. She contends that the fire actually benefits nature, helps to complete the natural cycle, thus make the nature more creative. However, this viewpoint contradicts the statement in the reading passage.

First of all, the lecturer indicates that the fire encourages the trees in forest to become more diverse, in addition, it brings precious opportunities for some kinds of plants to grow. For instance, some smaller plants will thrive on the open field where tree are burned down, some seeds may begin to grow with the help of heat. Nevertheless, this standpoint disagree with what the reading states: the fire causes tremendous damage to trees and vegetation.

Secondly, according to the speaker, the wildlife in the park recovered soon after the fire of 1980s in the yellow stone park, moreover, the fire even brought new chances for animals. Because of the thrive of small plants, there are habitants more than before provided for wildlife, hence, the predators of the small animals will find it easier to survive. Thus, the fire made the food chains stronger. Nonetheless, this opinion disproves the statement of the reading that the fire has bad effect on the wildlife.

Finally, the lecturer states that the fire does not often happen, and it is due to some abnormal conditions like bad wether conditions that the fire burned in 1980s in the yellow stone park. What's more, that fire had week effect on the tourists the year after that, not mention the economy. As a matter of fact, the tourists came back the year later. So the assertion that the fire ruined the business is definitely groundless.
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沙发
发表于 2012-9-6 16:54:05 | 只看该作者
既然只有一天时间了,那我就不说你的一些语法错误了(还好,也不多)。。
单单从文章结构这方面考虑,这篇综合还可以,但是有两问题:阅读的东西相对太少了点;甚至在finally中你都没有提到阅读的东西。
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-6 17:14:34 | 只看该作者
既然只有一天时间了,那我就不说你的一些语法错误了(还好,也不多)。。
单单从文章结构这方面考虑,这篇综合还可以,但是有两问题:阅读的东西相对太少了点;甚至在finally中你都没有提到阅读的东西。
-- by 会员 超级无敌小鹤鹤 (2012/9/6 16:54:05)




不是说综合里面重点写听力里的内容么?然后只要用一两句话说明一下这和reading中的哪个观点不同,比如说以上listening中的观点与reading中的某某观点不同(就像我finally中的最后一句话)?
reading要占多大比重啊?
地板
发表于 2012-9-6 18:01:17 | 只看该作者
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