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急问一篇AA和一篇AIJJ的写作思路~

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楼主
发表于 2008-9-24 16:42:00 | 只看该作者

急问一篇AA和一篇AIJJ的写作思路~

The primary responsibility of citizens is to obey their nation's civil and criminal laws.

Our factory in Cookville is our most advanced and efficient. It is capable of producing ten drill bits for each dollar of production costs, whereas none of our other factories can produce more than seven drill bits per dollar of production costs. Therefore, we can reduce our overall drill bit production costs by devoting the Cookville factory entirely to drill bit production. Since reducing the production costs of individual machine parts is the only way to achieve our larger goal of reducing our overall production costs, dedicating the Cookville factory entirely to drill bit production and shifting all other machine part production to our other factories will help us to attain that larger goal.”

谢谢大家!

沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2008-9-24 20:19:00 | 只看该作者
偶刚才看到AA前面人说的写作思路了,不过那篇AI的思路能提供点吗?
板凳
发表于 2008-10-1 09:20:00 | 只看该作者

俺的很不成熟的思路。给楼主批判。

AI:

开头:

第二段: Civil and criminal laws are legislated to make our society work effienctly and effectively.  举例,如果不遵守某项,会造成社会国家的动荡@_@

第三段:Civil and criminal laws give the rights for citizens to live well in their nation,  while citizens should obey the Civil and criminal laws to make sure the rights of themselves.

第四段:Some people may say they could economicly contribute more to the nation though breaking the Civil and criminal laws.  The saying might be justifiable in some extreme scenario, such as during war time. However larger economic contribution could not be an excuse to break the laws.

结尾

地板
发表于 2008-10-3 07:09:00 | 只看该作者
my two cents:

1 introduction,  position: abidance of civil and criminal right

2. I think the statement commits a fallacy of putting the cart in front of the horse. By aswering the question, we should firstly clarify the goal of a nation's civial and criminal laws. A established and well-practiced justice system would enable the majority of people to pursue happiness by protecting basic human rights and private property. The end is to increase the overall happiness of the people. There are a bunch of means to realize this end, one of which is the enforcement of civil and criminal laws. By switching the means with the end, we are thereby obligated to obey whatever the law asks us to do, a scenario which may result in catastrophic consequences. E.G. slaving african-americans, cuz once slavery was legalized.

3. By putting the abidance of criminal and civil laws the first priority, we will consequently lose the opportunity to amend our laws in accordance with our forever changing moral judgements. E.G. legalization of abortion and gay marriage. (abortion was once considered crime in U.S. and so was gay marriage.)

4. Admittedly..The stability of a country, which rests on a well implemented legal system, is necessary for us to live up to our potentials, to realize our dreams and to pursue our happiness. However, only when the civil and criminal laws represent our most selected values can we convincingly say that it is our primary....

5. Conclusion.
5#
发表于 2008-10-3 07:11:00 | 只看该作者
introduction,  position: abidance of civil and criminal laws is our  primary responsibility only when the spirit of such laws represent our most selected moral judgements.
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