第一次发作文

在下周六就要考试了，作文没有怎么多练习过，大概在十月底的时候写过几篇。最近被托福已经折磨的思维混乱。今天鼓足勇气，就在刚才写了一篇作文，三十分钟以内。都不知道自己写的是什么了，当时就一个劲的打字，内容估计有些目不忍视。但是还是想在此把作文给筒子们看看吧，也不怕丢脸了，希望大家给出中肯的意见，谢谢了！大概这样胡言乱语的作文考试能得到什么样的分数呢？

86. If you could go back to some time and place in the past, when and where would you go? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. 

If give me a chance to go back to some time and place in the past, I would go to the date of entering the college.I always think this is the one of the most important time in my life.I want to change my life anyway.

After I attended the examnation of entering the college, I didn't get a score as I expected.I had to go to the college which one I didn't like at all.This is one of the desicions I made false forever.From then on.I had to study the subject I unlike at all.

At that time, I didn't know the importance of studing the subject I like.As a result , I had to experience the difficulties for four years, which full of my bad memories.Especially my grandpa's died made me sad forever.

If I could go back to that time, I would choose  to research the subject I like.Math is my favourite subject.If I have the chance to study math, I absoultely try my best to study it well.I love the feeling of the satification of solving the problem, I also like the feeling of admiring my talent of math.

If I could go back to that time, I would have a happy time with my grandpa ,who is one of the most imporant person in my life,I admire his widen of knowledge,I appreciate his teaching of being a good person.However, I cherish the whole memory of him.I would try my best to take care of him, I also want him to guide me the way of life.Tell me what to do when I face difficulties.Remember the day I got the scholership in the college, nobody knew how much I want to share the happyness with him.

If I could go back to that time, actually, I would study harder than before.Whatever the subject I like or not, I'd try my best to study.Although most people said I had got a lot of rewards from the college.However, I don't think so.Because in my opinion, sometimes I don't try my best to do everything well.Such as the study of chemisty,I didn't listen to the teachers in class,even after class, I didn't review it at all.In the end, I passed the exam at a low score.If I was given a chance,I absolutely would study it well.

If I could go back to that time, I would choose to spending more time in the library.To tell the truth, I just went to the libray for several time in four years.There are numeous useful rescources in it,which are helpful to me.

All the time has gone away, the past just left me the memory.What I can do now is grap the truth.From now on, I will do the things pace to pace,try my best to achieve my dream of becoming a scientist in math field.

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