OG综合写作第一次尝试 求指点

感谢所有T友的悉心指导，请各位提提意见，也热切期盼有经验人士能给我一个大概的指点，这样的作文能得多少分，我应该如何改进，谢谢。

初来乍到，一切都不是很熟，希望在各位NN得关怀下茁壮成长。

Some resent research found that not only human but also meerkat, which is a kind animal that was used frequently as an example of Alttuism, is not really willing to scrifice themselves for others good.

The meerkat guard will not take responsibility before eating. They will eat before all the other meerkats. All the guard meerkats take the best position on which they will be able to see the predator first. The guard meerkat will escape at the fastest speed after issue the alarm. By giving alarm, the attention of the predator will be attracted by most of the meerkats in their dwell. Also, it is more dangerous to go out and looking for food than stay at home play guard. So the guard is actually in a safer place than most of the meerkat members.  But in the passage, all the facts above are listed to prove that the guards are doing altruistic sentinel behavior.

The same as the meerkats, human who share food with strangers or donate body organs to family members are not sacrificing only for people else. They are looking for something more important than food. They feel happy while be recognized as a hero. They want to donate for good fame. It is not altruism but a another kind of selfish behavior. Just opsite to the artical.

综合写作不好改

因为我们都没有阅读和听力的材料

其实，综合写作考的就是一个复述，只要听力中的点都在你的写作中体现出来，就可以了

只要不漏点就是了

还有就是，真实考试中的综合写作远比各类书籍中的简单，所以你不必太担心

谢谢德克 你真是热心好人啊

我都觉得IBT这边比GMAT温暖好多

恩，这个是OG上面那道题目来的。

按照您的指点，是不是说只要要点不漏掉，基本上综合写作4-5分都很容易？

谢谢

我就是害怕写作和口语一样，据大家说得那样，题目也不难，就是分数低。。。

对

综合写作主要是写听力部分的东西，阅读部分的稍微总结一下就可以了

在第一段陈述听力和阅读的关系（99.99％的可能性是听力反对阅读）

然后就每点对应着写（一般而言阅读都是3个点，听力也是3个点，而且都是按照顺序严格对应的）

复述的时候注意： 不要全部照搬原文的语言，最好有一些变化。

比如radically different在原文中出现，最好不直接写radically different，改写一下，比如写成fairly divergent这类的

谢谢指点

真是好人啊

非常非常地感动地说