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31 Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place?

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On an ordinary evening on campus, I went to a lecture on note-taking in conference interpreting. Amazed by the lecturer, the CEO of a leading interpreting and translation company and by his professional note-taking skills, I applied for their interpreting training programme held in another city other than my university and home. Staying in that city several months, my education and career has been elevated to a whole new level at an unprecedented speed. If you don't have such experience, you would never understand how much value moving between different places could add to your future.

Moving between different places avail yourself of numerous training and job opportunities, while staying in one place could limit your career, either by its location, economy or structures of industries. Taking interpreting in Mainland China as an example, mature interpreting industry only lies in Beijing and Shanghai, both of which boast dynamic economy, concentrated training programs, converged freelance interpreters, mature interpreters' employment mechanism by government bodies and frequent international conferences and expos. Professionals in industries such as IT, finance and many more are facing the same issue in choosing to be stuck in the same place or to move for the better.

A mobile life also enrich our cultural experiences. Another place often means another circle, where you meet people in a variety of professions, origins and personalities. Apart from the thrill of novelty, we learn more about different people and understand what we could not, thus becoming more knowledgeable, tolerant and cosmopolitan. By sharing others' experiences we broaden our horizons and gain deeper insight into the world. You can talk about educational systems around the globe with a Spanish girl in a Chinese restaurant, or consult a Thai financial manager about pension systems in different countries, or drive an Japanese car with your German friend to an Amercian amusement park, chatting about his experiences travelling around the world. 

A socially mobile life benefits our career in another way. In a Chinese society where social connections are extremely important, an expanded network of great diversity is an invaluable asset. You connect with a big-company CEO and get an admired decent job; you socialize with a government official and start in your company a new business, from which you earn a real fortune; you get acquianted with some elite who recommended you into a top grad school: all of these could not be accomplished if otherwise.

If you stay in one place the whole lifetime where everything is determined, you are miserably trapped by the boredness and stagnancy. Thanks to mobility, we can enjoy a more colorful, successful life that is worth a taste.

还不错  但最好条理更明晰一点。