TPO4 小作文求批改

yiyi20077 · 发表于 2013-10-4 14:49:39

The speaker in the lecture draws doubt on the reading by stating dinasours are not endotherns. While the author of the reading passage s\argues that the dinasours are actually endotherns with considerable evidence provided.

First of all, the lecture diagrees and sights that the polar area in actient time when dinasours lived there was not as cold as today. It was even warm enough for repitles to live. Even when later climate changed, the dianosours could migrate to warmer places or inhabitire. However, the author of the passage claimed that dinosaur fossils discovered in polar region can lend strong support to the the idea that the dinosaurs are active in the cold surroundings, which made them the endotherns.

Secondly,the lecture claimed that the positon of the legs of dnosaurs are to support more weight instesd of for runnig faster. With the legs posed underneath the body, the dinasour can have larger body whil\ch will definety do good to their situations in the predators world.On the other han, the reading conclude that the legs of dinosaurs underderneath the body, unlike the reptile such as crocodiles, proved to be one reason that the dinosaus were entherms.

Finally, the speaker of the listening lecture claimed that the harersian canals has nothing to do with dinasour being endotherms. The growth reins in the bones of the dianosaurs indicated that there was a period when dianosaurs growed quickly and then slower, which marks the defining growth patterns of reptiles. They tend to grow quicker in warmer environment and slow donw when it becomes cooler.On the contrary, the writer stated that the haversian canals density in bones is a typical characteristics of animals who maintan internal temperaure of 37c.

这是超超级原始版就是三十分钟时候黏贴下来错别字都没有更改过哈，望各位大神批改的说！！！字数 287字

elealigu · 发表于 2013-10-4 17:16:17

On the contrary, the writer stated that the haversian canals density in bones is a typical characteristics of animals who maintan internal temperaure of 37c. 语法有问题However, the author of the passage claimed that dinosaur fossils discovered in polar region can lend strong support to the the idea that the dinosaurs are active in the cold surroundings, which made them the endotherns.同语法问题...文章内容还不错，但拼写惨不忍睹呀，注意点.然后the speaker in the lecture 这里貌似有点不符合习惯

yiyi20077 · 发表于 2013-10-6 20:10:20

elealigu 发表于 2013-10-4 17:16
On the contrary, the writer stated that the haversian canals density in bones is a typical character ...

感激不尽，你是第一个看我作文给指导意见的人了！！！这文章大概能拿个几分呢？

elealigu · 发表于 2013-10-7 11:14:47

CD都没什么有营养的回复了，如果按你这个的话，4分给个2分，错别字太多了，第一遍看就刷了一半分，果然都改了4分

可以有点小错误^_^

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