twe011 恳请大家修改，多谢！

Do you agree or disagree that universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries.

    It is a controversial issue whether the universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries or not Depending on the personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, everyone has his/her different opinion. As far as I concerned, I agree this statement. My arguments are as follows.

    As everyone knows that the students of universities spend a lot of time in libraries, they come here to search for the references, make the new friends who have something in common and so forth. So the libraries of universities are very important for the hard-working students. At the same time, the libraries supply the students with a quiet place for studying. There are no noises here, and it creates a good circumstance for students to charge the experience, and compete for a better progress with each other as well. Hence, it is really true the universities should spend much money in constructing the useful libraries.

    As the view above mentioned that, the libraries are the essential equipments for students' studying. However, some people alert that the activities of students are time-consuming jobs, they are useless for learning. In fact, a research tells us that the moderate sports activities can help us study effectively. They can relieve our pressure which comes from the heavy study loads, the huge costs of school programs, and they can even improve our memories. In the meanwhile, it is obvious that students can make themselves stronger and stronger through sports activities. Most people realized the fact that the healthy is the necessary condition for anything else, we can not do anything without a health body. so we have no causes to deny that the sports activities are as significant as university libraries, even more helpful.

    In conclusion, according to the comparison with each other, we find the libraries are inevitable for students, they offer a lot of benefits to students on spirits. On the other hand, the students can not study well without the relevant sports activities, they provide the vigorous students many benefits on bodies. Apparently, the numerous sports activities are the same important as the libraries to an eminent university. So it is reasonable that the universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries.

文章结构乱。

后面两段主要是想说什么？没有关系的话不要写；只用一段来说明图书馆的用处不够。

很努力啊，向你学习。新年了。万事如意！

多谢前辈修改，但是我理解的是题目强调sports activities的重要性而不是libraries,所以我先写libraries,再写sports activities,我是想通过将它们进行比较，然后指出它们同等重要，所以写了后两段，这是我当时的想法，可能是不恰当，请前辈指教，还有不知这篇文章能得几分呢？／

还有那个句子是they create a good circumstance for students to exchange experience,and the students can compete for a better progress with each other as well

那样写比较难把握。建议你同意的观点多写，不同意的只是作为补充。不要试图表达复杂的思想和用复杂的方式证明。这样也难把握。先练练托福的八股文-五段式。练好了，再求变化，无招出自有招。

再练练，能上5分

多谢前辈，我会努力的！