小妞马上要上战场求大神批改作文呐~

jennywang911 · 发表于 2012-10-25 23:04:51

People should know about events happening around world even if they have little influence on their daily lives.

Knowledge of world events as the heatedly discussed issue has benn controversial since it is raised up. The paradox triggers the storm of arguing and discussing and people fall into it with confusion. A notion that acquiring knowledge of events happening around world is necessary is advocated by many critics. Although waste some time, gaining more information of the world events is useful in people's lives and work. General arguments and specific examples will supposedly be displayed to demonstrate the direction of the judgment which is relevant to the necessity to know international events.

First and foremost, the more information of global affairs people obtain, the more funs and colors will be added to their lives. As gaining the knowledge of global climates can reveal the mystery of atmosphere, discussing the British new policy can help us to remend and improve our policies, and listening the sounds of birds can develop the interests of animal melodies, people's lives will be seriously and heavily enriched by learning events happened all over the world. Not only can people form their hobbies, they can even develop such favors into occupations, which expands their career scopes.

Further, having a wide range of knowledge may be beneficial to various aspects of lives. This point can be confirmed by an example of my brother, who has been showed great interests in wild animals ever since he was 12 years old. Once he was chatting with his business client, he suddenly found that his client was also a crazy fun in the wild animals field. Two hours had been spent on their fierce discussions about the same interest, wild animals. Obviously, the client is satisfied with my brother and agreed to assign a longer business agreement with him. Grandly, he didn't intend to take advantage of this hobby. Nevertheless, he benefited from it eventually.

What's more, relations between person to person can be boosted by discussions of some popular events. Voice of china, a novel TV show, sweep the whole country this summer. Every Friday, my family and I will sit in front of the televison on time, watched the shows of singers and discussed the characters and performances of them. Never have I enjoyed a same program with my parents for several years. The relationship between my parents and I, actually, was improved by the same interest on this event.

Base on the compelling justifications above, we can conclude that it's necessary and beneficial to know the events happened around the world. People who are informed and learned are able to gain unexpected fortunes in the future.

jennywang911 · 发表于 2012-10-25 23:06:32

昂我自己先顶一个~苦求大家帮我看看哈~我自己其实改了下语法错误，然后就木有别的改动了，还算原汁原味的哈。。11.初的考试。。着急啊

jennywang911 · 发表于 2012-10-29 10:33:56

People are now easier to become educated than in the past

Education as a heatedly discussed issue has been controversial since it is raised up. Paradox triggers a storm of arguing and debating and people fall into confusions. A notion that people in this day and age are more difficult to become educated than people in the past is advocated by some critics. Nonetheless, development of human beings, society and society conditions have move many barriers for people to reach education. General statements and specific examples will supposedly be displayed to demonstrate the direction of the judgment which is relevant to the education level in the current society.

First and foremost, human begings are soaring intelligent, astute and clever than before. Gratuitous assumption made by people who contend that previous human beings are more informed and gifted misleads them to embark on the wrong crossroad. Grantedly, we have witnessed the intelligence of previous huamn beings by large number of gorgeous buildings they made. Nevertheless, after the thousands of years' development, human's brains have been skyrocketing rich. Scientist have explored mistery of nature, doctors have treated quantities of terrible diseases and musicians have composed numerous fascinating songs. Such development, obviously, reveal a fact that people have acquired more education than their ancestors.

Further, invention and development of novel technology provides people more avenues to be educated. Still limited as our knowledge is on some fields, people have already probed plenty of original and useful technology. Not only can we buy any book we need online, but we can also search the courses of most of universities wth the help of internet. This point can be confirmed by an example of my brother, who study at home by himself rather than go to school. So talented as he is, he has viewed all the open coursed of Harvard online in the past 3 months. He reaches to education simply by virtue of computer and internet.

What's more, people are more disirable to be educated than before. It's apperant that economic environment in the past decades is negative and terrible. In contrast, overall surroundings nowadays are becoming increasing better. Citizens who have enough money to support their lives will stil more passion on education.

Based on the compelling justifications above, we can conclude that human beings get in touch with education easier and easier. he view that people will still meet many obstacles on the way to education seems superficially indisputable but totally incomplete.

jennywang911 · 发表于 2012-10-29 10:40:00

木有人我自己先顶。。。

小妞马上要上战场求大神批改作文呐~

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