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[作文互改] issue 20 求狠拍,并求问怎样才可以让自己的作文被批

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发表于 2012-8-26 21:27:58 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
笨鸟一只,刚开始写issue,对自己的文章没有概念,故跪求各位看官一件。并求问怎样才可以让自己的作文被批的体无完肤呢?

ISSUE20 Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availabilitiesofjobs in that field.

 With the fabulous development of our society and the striking explosion of knowledge, there is an amazing up concern on the issue of factors taken into consideration when a college student decide his study field which incites abundant disagreements among distinctive people.To be specific, some people may say Just follow your heart! while others are on the opposite approving a field that can bridge you with a satisfied job.When it comes to my perspective, I think that both interests and future job are considerable important in choosing our field of study, thus they should be taken into consideration at the same time, in a rationally manner.

  The successful chances are high when a student are studying on the field to which his interests and energy are devoted unconditionally . Just as a sage proverb goes "interests are the best teacher", interests as well as energy would play an prodigal role in leading a students succes on certain field. Conversely, imagine the consequence that if a maverick student is forced to learn the subject which he detests, the result may be terrible.For example, if the brilliant scientist Newton, the founder of the modern physics, are left to do research on how genes could magically decide our healthy conditions. I am afraid that he will achieve nothing in this helpful field, let alone making great breakthrough . Even though this is only a hyperbole which are not extant in our real world, it potently persuade us that students may fail to success in a field without interests and talents.

  Nevertheless, it does not mean that each college student should made the choice about learning field completely depend on their interests, especially on account of the reality quandaries. According to Maslows Hierarchy of Needs, physiological needs is ranked at the first place of humans need rather than other things, which means that nothing would worth more concentration than finding a profit job in order to satisfy us humanity. Howbeit, it would be hard for a student who lack the capacity that suit some companies' need to find a pleasant job, even though he was excellent in his interested field as long as the field is not compatible with the taste of our society, after he graduates. The paradox mentioned above shows us that when we are facing the problem of choosing learning field, the availability of jobs in that field is an vital factor that can never be neglected.

 Then, how could we deal with this dilemma about choice? Because to linger between reality and dreams is the predestined lifestyle of humanity, the only thing a hesitant student can do is balance over the two factor. Whats more, our society are called to set funds in university patronizing intelligent students to develop their interests.
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沙发
发表于 2012-8-29 10:49:37 | 只看该作者
With the fabulous development of our society and the striking explosion of knowledge, there is an amazing up concern on the issue of factors taken into consideration when a college student decide his study field which incites abundant disagreements among distinctive people.
这个句子里有单复数错误。
板凳
发表于 2012-8-29 10:50:04 | 只看该作者
The successful chances are high when a student are studying on the field to which his interests and energy are devoted unconditionally .
单复数错误
地板
发表于 2012-8-29 10:50:54 | 只看该作者
Nevertheless, it does not mean that each college student should made the choice about learning field completely depend on their interests,
时态错误
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发表于 2012-8-29 10:51:53 | 只看该作者
our society are called to set funds in university patronizing intelligent students to develop their interests.

单复数错误。
6#
发表于 2012-8-29 10:52:04 | 只看该作者
没有一段是完美的。
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-9 20:07:29 | 只看该作者
our society are called to set funds in university patronizing intelligent students to develop their interests.

单复数错误。
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/8/29 10:51:53)


额,嗯嗯,谢狠批。注意注意,加油改进.
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