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发表于 2012-7-26 14:49:22 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
Topic: Do you agree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support?


Unfortunately, I personally disagree with this statement and my rationales are listed as followings.


In the first place, in my opinion, university is a place for graduates to absorb knowledge, which is the primary reason to be there for four years. That is to say, as a college student, taking classes and going to libraries are the vital tasks that, in the first place, should be fulfilled. Therefore, the role a financial support should play is to encourage students to accomplish this task better or to award those who have done well to fulfil this goal. For example, scholarship in my university will be given out once a year and only to those who achieve great scores or academic glories.


In the second place, sports and social activities belong to the range of extracurricular activities together with internship and volunteering experience. If say, winning a basketball champion should be awarded financially, should a student who find himself or herself a summer intern place in JP Morgan Chase be prized as well or those who hold hands with Obama during an interview or something? Do all those activities help students directly to do better in classes or academia? The answer seems to be negative.


Moreover, unlike scores and researches which can be evaluated under certain predetermined standard, those extracurricular activities show no distinguishable features over one another. Could we say that a position in JP Morgan Chase is more adorable than one in Morgan Stanley? Or could we possible argue that hands of Obama will win one more credits than those of Clinton? Probably not. If not, how can financial support be given out based on such an ambiguous criterion, if any?


Nevertheless, I have to note that I disagree to give financial support to experts in sports and social activities does not mean I perceive them as unimportant or useless. Still, university is a place to cultivate well-rounded elites instead of nerds. Sports and social activities encouraged properly will no doubt be very helpful to get to this ultimate goal.


To sum up, I disagree with this statement because of roles of these two parts of university achievements playing as well as the restrictions to build a solid evaluation system on the sports and social activities while I do agree that they are important for the nurture of future talents.
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