拖延症老人终于下决心开写了，求砖拍，求鄙视

zombiee · 发表于 2012-6-10 11:11:43

6.10开始起航，先熟悉一下，热身，立马投入小分队的大军中~
TOEFL我来啦

jiaosisisisi · 发表于 2012-6-10 11:32:43

blessings for u!

zombiee · 发表于 2012-6-10 15:09:31

blessings for u!

-- by 会员 jiaosisisisi (2012/6/10 11:32:43)

thx for your kindness.

zombiee · 发表于 2012-6-10 15:09:51

6月10日100312 NA

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To make children do well at school, parents should limit the hours that a child spends on watching TV.

As some scholars said, TV is the worst invention in the 20th century. Scientists from Tsinghua university have a survey to found out how the electrical device has affected human beings in the last one hundred years. The researchers set two groups. One group is aged between 60 to 70 who did not watch TV more than 1 hour daily and did not have affected by TV in the paper and pencil era. The other group, to the opposite , is composed of people aged between 10 to 20 who definitely are the new-agey technology beneficiaries. Researchers gave the two groups the same tests that require them to think logically and concentrately regardless of their knowledge backgroud. To our surpise the elder group did better on most of tests written either with or without visual and audio material. But the younger group sucks in the test without visual and audio and could not focus during the whole test. The researchers suggested that TV watching experience could lower the volunteer’s capability of logical thinking and concentration far more than we had previously thought.
Maybe it is too extreme to condemn TV just becaue its convinence brings about our laziness and distraction. Admittedly the widely spread invention of 20th century has entertained us with amusement and informed us with the most recently viedo news and knowledge.
But when it comes to children at school, how should their parents consider the pros and cons of TV. As far as I am concerned, to make children do well at school, parents are supposed to limit the hours that children spend on watching TV. According to the recent report of a survey, 92 percent of the TV programs are not suitable to the children and the rest are only for entertainment.
Besides most TV programs today are full of obscene and offensive language and behavior. Although we adults may not affected by these material. But, both common sense and our experience with children inform us that people tend to mimic the language and behavior they are exposed to.
In sum, it is in our best interest to limit the hour that children spend on TV. That is to say if you have to pay for the good performance at school, control your TV controller.

晨依Jacqueline · 发表于 2012-6-10 16:20:50

来拜读僵尸先森的大作~

zombiee · 发表于 2012-6-10 20:13:48

来拜读僵尸先森的大作~

-- by 会员晨依Jacqueline (2012/6/10 16:20:50)

怎么没声儿了，是不是去吐了

晨依Jacqueline · 发表于 2012-6-10 22:11:47

来拜读僵尸先森的大作~

-- by 会员晨依Jacqueline (2012/6/10 16:20:50)

怎么没声儿了，是不是去吐了

-- by 会员 zombiee (2012/6/10 20:13:48)

Mr. Zombie
我是害怕先入为主了影响给你互评的童鞋发挥呀。不细致说啦~
Personally speaking, I think there are a few differences between the writing of G & T.
To be exact, G & T require different skills of their test-takers.(You'd better refer to the OG if it is convenient.)

Your Strength--sufficient data(very persuasive!), rigorous logical analysis, advanced expression, etc.

Your Weakness--structure(Important! In my view, a good composition should observe some disciplines and be well-organized. ) small spelling mistakes.
Anyway, you did a better job than I did the first time.

zombiee · 发表于 2012-6-11 00:03:13

来拜读僵尸先森的大作~

-- by 会员晨依Jacqueline (2012/6/10 16:20:50)

怎么没声儿了，是不是去吐了

-- by 会员 zombiee (2012/6/10 20:13:48)

Mr. Zombie
我是害怕先入为主了影响给你互评的童鞋发挥呀。不细致说啦~
Personally speaking, I think there are a few differences between the writing of G & T.
To be exact, G & T require different skills of their test-takers.(You'd better refer to the OG if it is convenient.)

Your Strength--sufficient data(very persuasive!), rigorous logical analysis, advanced expression, etc.

Your Weakness--structure(Important! In my view, a good composition should observe some disciplines and be well-organized. ) small spelling mistakes.
Anyway, you did a better job than I did the first time.

-- by 会员晨依Jacqueline (2012/6/10 22:11:47)

Thank you so much! Appreciate your recommendation.
My virgin composition get its value by your reply.

zombiee · 发表于 2012-6-11 00:31:47

My word program does not have the spell checking function. =。=

晨依Jacqueline · 发表于 2012-6-11 01:04:33

join our QQ group~
discuss more with group members!

you could reread the post on the top of the webpage(the post to which you stick your URL ) and discover the everyday arrangement of revising compositions.
you have already got your task on 10th Jun.
Check it on that post~~~Then,
follow the rules on the post--revise other's writing and get ur own writing revised. It's easy.
sorry for giving you such a late reply.
Good night Mr. Zombie

拖延症老人终于下决心开写了，求砖拍，求鄙视

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