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[作文互改] Issue 28 求狂虐求狂拍!!先谢过大家了!!

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发表于 2012-4-17 17:16:29 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
Honestly, for a great nation, the general wellfare is of great importance. However, the speaker's statement is too extreme by precluding the achievements of all rulers, scientists or artists. In my opinion, a great nation should be built upon both the general welfare of its people and the achievements of certain individuals. In other words, both of them are necessary conditions, but neither of them is sufficient condition.



To start with, we have to admit that the general wellfare of people is the foremost foundation to build up a stable and strong nation. The following three reasons strongly support this point. In the first place, the general welfare of people is the basis for the power of a nation. Whether a nation is powerful or not is not decided by the welfare of the few people who owns large amount of money of who enjoys great power. Instead, it is the standard of living of the common citizens, who accounts for the majority of a society that reflects a nations' power. For example, whether a citizen enjoys a perfect health care offered by the government reflects the extent of perfection of a nation's health care system; whether children share equal education opportunities regardless of their background represents how powerful a nation would become in the future, since children are the leaders of the unknown world. Thus, the genaral welfare of a nation not only reflects how powerful a nations is, it probably decides how powerful it will be in the future.



Furthermore, the general welfare of people is the prerequisite for a nation to keep a stable society. As long as the basic interests of people are guranteed by the government will the citizens stay obedient to the rulers and keep loyal to the nation. If the citizens' general welfare can't be guaranteed, there will probably be revolts among the citizens, which would damage the stability of a nation. Countless revolts which leads to the collapse of a nation are good examples for this point. Conversely speaking, separating the general welfare of people will easily bring the nation to collapse. Let's suppose a nation puts the general welfare of its people aside, and tries to build a strong nation simply based on the welfare of the few people, like the rich and the authorities, such a nation is no difference from autocracy. The discontent among the general public will easily lead to rebellion, trying to destroy the autocratic government. In one word, the greatness of a nation will never be separated from the general welfare of its people, which is the foremost ground of a great nation.



Nevertheless, when considering the greatness of a nation, the achievements of a few individuals can't be ignored as well. Their achievements are the motivation for a country to prosper. For example, without wise rulers, a nation would be in disarray. And without social order, what citizens are dealing with in that society would be to solve conflict, even through violence. Besides, without artists, the spiritual world of a nation could hardly develop. A nation that is completely blank in the cultural world would be a "limp" that could never be called a fully-developed great nation. Furthermore, without the contribution of scientists, there would never be inventions like spacecrafts, submarines, or radars that could strongly defense a nation. And a nation with almost no defensive power is so fragile that would never become a great nation. Thus, the achievements of rulers, artists, and scientists can't be ignored when we measure the greatness of a nation.



In one word, when we choosing indicators for the greatness of a nation, we should neither forget the general welfare of its citizens, nor ignore the achievements of the few people who have made great contribution. The general welfare is the foundation of a great nations, while the achievements made by the talented few is the motivation for the prosperity of the nation.
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沙发
发表于 2012-4-17 20:47:09 | 只看该作者
这篇写得挺好的
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-4-17 23:47:04 | 只看该作者
多谢普渡哥鼓励!感觉issue时间不够啊~~大概写多少字可以5.0呢?
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-4-17 23:47:58 | 只看该作者
这篇写得挺好的
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/4/17 20:47:09)


多谢普渡哥鼓励!!感觉issue时间不够啊~~~写多少字可以5.0呢?
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发表于 2012-4-18 16:30:23 | 只看该作者
写的不错,但要到5.0,字数并不是决定因素,好的AW体现在清晰准确有说服力的逻辑推理,好的文章结构,好的语言组织和表达,字数300多字也可能6分的
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