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发表于 2012-2-12 15:07:55 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development.
Q2: 建议利弊型


Should governments place few, if any, restriction on scientific research and development? The speaker claims so. However I propose that there should be to some extent limit on the scientific research in some situation, sometimes we should not limit the freedom of scientific research.

I admit that, without restriction, development of some field of science is extremely harmful. Because the power of outcome of some research is so unpredictable, if it is not used in the safe way, catastrophe will likely come to us. For example, the nuclear research proved to be the paradigm of the pernicious side of science.Even when Einstein felt regret for the invention of nuclear weapon, not only a single letter had been post to the president of United States, which revealed the strong recommendation of Einstein for prevention of the usage of nuclear weapon. However, the government didn't take these remonstration into consideration about restriction.So, when the nuclear bomb was finally thrown on Japan, nearly two million people died because of its deadly radiation and even more people from several generations around this places suffered from the effect of mutation of gene, which made their children inherently disabled. Could suchresearch be supported by government? What kind of result would be if nuclear research was further progressed without the interference from government? Perhaps a little mistake on such developed experiment could destroy half of the planet. Hence, these dangerous research obviously should be restricted.

However, in the most times, development of science is of great importance to the convenience to ourdaily life. It is our way to take a insight into nature, and to make use of it to bring light to life. Indeed, the beneficial side of the development of science has witnessed by the last two centuries.The revolution of industry and the revolution of information, which produced the most profit field in the world-the Internet technology, have a dramatical impact on our daily life. Without the revolution of industry, perhaps we won't be able to go to school from suburb,and won't be able to read news just in front of the TV. Without the latter revolution, we cannot type writing on a keyboard, and cannot contact my family from another country by ICQ. Thus, under this situation above,  the development of science is beneficial to our life. If restricted, what a great loss would come to us?

Moreover, development of science on some other parts is also beneficial to us onhealth.Development of modern medicine has progressed to make human life longer.,and less sickness.According to a survey, compared with last century the average of human on the planet has increased proportional to the development of medicine, which shows a significant influence on the beneficial side of development of science. Thus, the development shields human from disease. Nevertheless, these benefit would all be diminished if we take restrictions on them.

In conclusion, restrictions placed on scientific research should be considered carefully on different possible outcome. Anyway, the seeming sin of science is caused by the virulentpurpose of people who use it.Restriction should be considered differently and scrupulously on certain condition, otherwisewe may impede the development of science and lead to slowdown success in our future or maybe incur a great lossin ourselves.

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沙发
发表于 2012-2-12 15:20:31 | 只看该作者
这篇文章写得特别好,逻辑很清晰,英文表达很贴切。作者可以这几天再读读满分作文,记住,一定要抓住逻辑,不然写得再好耶没有用。这篇很好!
板凳
发表于 2012-2-12 23:03:21 | 只看该作者
1. I admit that, without restriction(s), development of some field(s) of science is (can be) extremely harmful.
2. not only a single letter had been post to the president of United States, which revealed the strong recommendation of Einstein for prevention of the usage of nuclear weapon. (--don't get it...)
3. more people from (for) several generations around this (these) places suffered from the effect of mutation of gene (gene mutations),
4. be supported by >the< government?
5. What kind of result would >there< be if
6. progressed without the (omit,  THE) interference from government?
7. Perhaps a little mistake on such (replace SUCH with A VERY) developed experiment could destroy half of the planet.

I like it
地板
发表于 2012-2-12 23:41:02 | 只看该作者
看完后觉得你需要注意下一些简单的语法和短语使用错误。结构安排比较合理,这种展开方式蛮好的。我自己或许会从科学的领域来论证,但最终效果一样。
5#
发表于 2012-2-13 00:28:33 | 只看该作者
呵呵,建议利弊型的文章,我这个考前写的挺多的,思路结构没有问题,希望楼主留出时间关注细节,避免不必要的失分
6#
发表于 2012-2-20 21:27:40 | 只看该作者
我觉得说对我们的健康有益 可以 改为还可以带来很多其他方面好处。个人建议
7#
发表于 2012-2-20 21:29:21 | 只看该作者
楼主稍微回应下哈~~不要一言不发 很闷的说~~要探讨!!!~
8#
发表于 2012-2-20 23:14:06 | 只看该作者
楼主应该已经考完了。。不知道考得怎么样。。
9#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-2-21 14:50:56 | 只看该作者
楼主应该已经考完了。。不知道考得怎么样。。
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/2/20 23:14:06)


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10#
发表于 2012-2-21 21:26:04 | 只看该作者
整体不错,第一段说一些研究不加限制就不好。那么,后两段上来说一下大多数研究限制不好,这样逻辑会更清楚一点,当然楼主这么写也没问题
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