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发表于 2012-2-3 01:07:47 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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With the explosive development of science and technology, the well-being of a society is being put at an crucial status. When it comes to the influence on the well-being of a society when people question authority, a lot of different opinions are held by different individuals. Will the well-being of a society enhance when many of its people question authority? Admittedly, in many aspects the people's questioning are benefit for the society. However, the excessive questioning by its people may get side effects to the well-being of a society.

To begin with, it is accurate that people question authority means there are problems in the society now. The problems have already got negative influence on the welfare of people at the same time. Without solving the problems quickly, there would be even more questions among the people after a long period. Moreover, only people really care about the society and the authority really intend to help the people improving the welfare, could the people question authority which reflected the belief for authority. Thus it will make a virtuous cycle for the whole society and in this way the well-being of the society can be enhanced through people question authority. Thinking about the opening and reforming policy of China, at that time people question authority for whether it can improve their's welfare, because many citizens cannot make a basic living in that period. Knowing about this question, authority solved the question by practicing the reforming policy and it really worked brilliantly.

Furthermore, some questions would help change the society greatly. Some questions by people will promote the changing of the authority, thus the authority can be more nearly to the perfect. The positive changing of authority can also make great effects on the whole society, and the increasingly development of society will enhance the well-being of the society. Just like the revolution by Shen Chen and Guang Wu or the storming of the Bastille both changed and promoted the development of the society in China and France. The latter better societies made their people had a better life.

However, if many people excessively question authority, it will make bad influence on authority. The more questions by its people, the more suspects among the society. Thus the increasing number of people would conclude the questions were caused by authority. It will definitely affect the stability of authority. The instability would result in armed rebellions. Once the conflict is happening, what's the worst victims from this? Absolutely the answer is people. History see many examples about conflicts and wars, such as American Civil War, people all lived in a miserable life during the war. In this situation, the well-being of a society cannot enhance, or even be  undermined.

In summary, the well-being of a society will be enhanced when many of its people question authority in many aspects, yet the excessive question will deteriorate the society.
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沙发
发表于 2012-2-3 21:38:20 | 只看该作者
题目的问题是质疑权威而不是质疑政策和社会。。。为什么大家都喜欢谈政府呢?权威可以有很多方面,亚理斯多德也是权威。
板凳
发表于 2012-2-5 22:27:51 | 只看该作者
1. is being put at an (a)crucial status.

The choice of article is actually based upon the phonetic (sound) quality of the first letter in a word, not on the orthographic (written) representation of the letter. If the first letter makes a vowel-type sound, you use "an"; if the first letter would make a consonant-type sound, you use "a." However, you may follow these basic rules when deciding to use "a" or "an," remembering that there are some exceptions to the rules.

"A" goes before words that begin with consonants.

   a cat
   a dog
   a purple onion
   a buffalo
   a big apple

"An" goes before words that begin with vowels:

   an apricot
   an egg
   an Indian
   an orbit
   an uprising

Exceptions

Use "an" before unsounded "h." Because the "h" hasn't any phonetic representation and has no audible sound, the sound that follows the article is a vowel; consequently, "an" is used.

   an honorable peace
   an honest error

When "u" makes the same sound as the "y" in "you," or "o" makes the same sound as "w" in "won," then a is used. The word-initial "y" sound ("unicorn") is actually a glide [j] phonetically, which has consonantal properties; consequently, it is treated as a consonant, requiring "a."

   a union
   a united front
   a unicorn
   a used napkin
   a U.S. ship
   a one-legged man

2. When it comes to the influence on the well-being of a society when people question authority, a lot of different opinions are held by different individuals.  ---the first part of this sentence is really hard to understand
3. questioning are benefit (beneficial) for the society.
4. excessive questioning >of a nation< by its people
5. people may get (have) side effects
6. To begin with, it is accurate that people question authority means there are problems in the society now.  ----i think this sentence needs to be rewritten
7. The problems (--what problems??) have already got (omit ALREADY GOT) negative influence on the welfare of people at the same time.
8. Moreover, only >the< people really care about the society and the authority >and who< really intend to help the people improving (improve) the welfare, could >be< the people >who< question authority which reflected (reflects) the (their) belief for authority. ---I think this is what you meant?
9. through people question(ing) authority.


I'm going to stop here because I think there is already a lot for you to think about.
地板
发表于 2012-2-6 01:50:06 | 只看该作者
普度哥的评论让我想到:对题目的理解不要有太多的先入为主和惯性思维,就想去安慰,不要一提到权威就想到政府啊什么的关于权力上的权威,而要多想想,是否有其他的,比如学术,艺术,文学等等,以后类似题目需要多注意挖掘关键词的深刻而广泛的含义,而不要狭隘了,如果你想写比较小的范围的话题,也可以的,在第一段需要限定下,这样也不会显得不严密哦。
另外你的语法和表达上的问题还是不少的,多多练习,多多注意,现在时间足的话多练习下句子表述,不要让这个给你减分。继续努力,期待新作
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