请大家看看我的这篇issues，快考了，真是有点紧张。

abby8248 · 发表于 2010-3-5 11:48:43

练习了几篇，还是没什么感觉，一篇至少要写50分钟以上，而且思路不是很清楚。
昨天写的这篇，第二点和最后反驳的一段，自己觉得是不一样的论证，但是写出来又觉得好像有些重复。
希望大家给些建议。小女子感谢大家啦！

As technologies and the demand for certain services change, many workers will lose their jobs. The responsibility for those people to adjust to such change should belong to the individual worker, not to government or to business.

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

The world is developing so fast, along with the advances in technologies and different demand for services. Because of the automation or new operations, many workers, especially those whose skills and experiences are out of date may face the risk of losing their jobs. Who is responsible for them- the government, the business or the workers themselves? For my part, the government and the business take more responsibilities.

The main reason for my view is that, the change of technologies and services benefit the business and the government directly. Workers are the human capital to enhance the business competency by using the advanced technologies or providing competitive services according to the company's requirements. These changes are out of the workers' control. Proper measures must be taken by business or government to help the employees to adjust to such changes. For example, Business can provide good training, give workers time to get prepared for the changed work. Government should guide the business correctly to be responsible for workers. At least, workers must be given enough help and resources to promote or change themselves.

Another reason is that, it is hard for workers to adjust to such changes, because some technologies supersede the employees' work. It is indisputable the fact that, more and more advanced technologies especially the automations have taken the place of human works. Such technology progresses saved the costs for businesses and government, but on the sacrifices of people losing their jobs. It brought serious affects to these workers' lives. So it is unreasonable to equate these kinds of layoffs with workers' incompetency to adjust to the changes.

Some people may claim that workers must keep studying new knowledge and skills to become more competitive. They think people should be responsible for themselves and adjust to new situations. But, the truth is that the number of workers that business need is decreasing based on these new technologies in all. In the opposite, government should encourage business to create more job opportunities, and give more valuable training and education on the base of analysis for future development.

In sum, government and business must be responsible for the workers. For the society's future development, employees are the most valuable resources. So helping them to promote in order to adjust to the changes is meaningful.

abby8248 · 发表于 2010-3-5 11:58:01

自己顶一下，斑竹大人呢

spensertracy · 发表于 2010-3-7 16:44:00

不好意思，这几天期中考试，忙的昏天黑地，我尽快给你看看。

spensertracy · 发表于 2010-3-24 15:37:28

不好意思，很久之后才回复。

探讨一下思路的问题。
我觉得这个题目写三个支持的例子不是太好写。你写到后面越来越短，感觉已经没什么好说的了。而且第一个你的“main reason”，我觉得说的不是太到位。你的逻辑是，政府和企业是科技进步的受益者，所以应该帮助员工来适应这种变化。但是你在原因部分又写到“ These changes are out of the workers' control.” 这和第二点有点相似。我觉得这个观点不错，但是可以这么切入：政府和企业是科技进步的受益者，而员工对企业的发展做出了贡献，企业对员工的保障不仅可以体现企业对员工的责任和重视，更可以增强企业的内部凝聚力和企业文化。
另外，从企业的社会责任的角度，也可以阐述一下这个问题。对于没有能力适应新技术或者年龄过大的员工，应该保障。
反面的观点可以写一个。比如员工有责任和义务，在有条件的情况下，学习新的知识和技术，这是科技进步对员工的要求。如果依赖企业和政府，不利于员工的进步。所以总的来说，就是条件需要企业和政府创造，但是学习还是得看主观能动性。

abby8248 · 发表于 2010-4-1 12:01:12

斑竹大人，你终于出现了，谢谢你。
我觉得我也有一段写完，后边就没话说的毛病，可能观点写得也是有点大。
谢谢你给我的建议，我会重新再组织一下。

请大家看看我的这篇issues，快考了，真是有点紧张。

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