[求助]刚写一篇作文，求各位大侠帮小弟看看

马上就要考了，还是一塌糊涂。怕得要命，毕竟水平太次。。现在找了个模板写了篇，想考试的时候差不多改改就上了，所以现在求各位高手帮我指明一下我作文中的错误，我真的有点晕了。还有想问一下，我在写的时候描述例子是不是要多用transition啊？多谢了，大家。

Television has had a mostly positive effect on society.

A rencent investigation conducted by scientists reveals that televison has been playing an significant role during the developing of our society.Nowadays,there is a public debate over the fact that televison takes positive impact on society.Those who criticize that televison makes our life worse.They believe that too many negative phenomenons are countinous growing because of television.But people who advocate that television is like a happiness maker,on the other hand,argue that television will lead to better life.While both thoughts may have their advantages and disadvantages,they can be applied under different circumstances.In my point of view,I insist that television takes bad influences on our society mostly.The following statements will demonstrate why I am absolutely certain.

The instance is not isolated,it is typical of dozens.I have encountered that one of my brothers, indulged in the computer games,broke his parents' heart and almost ruined his life.However,the turning point came.He was deeply astonished by a television programme which characterized a kind mother rise her boy alone in a hard way of life.Conscience pull him back from the abyss of self-abandon eventually to be himself.The most benifit of television has the power of impact which influences people to understand themselves,calls on them to treat others well through the good behaviors from what they saw on the television.And Society will become more harmonious and filled with kindheart due to these television influences.

Futhermore,another strong argument for television brings positive effect is that more than thousands of television support comanies came out,compared with those in 1999.Such as ChangHong,Konka,Sony and so on.These companies produce the newest types of televisions by using the highest technology,support the finest products to the citizens.Each of these companies stimulates the economy of local cities,provides a plenty of job opportunities to the dwellers,extremely upgrades the quality of life and development of basic structures in our nation.These evidences reflect the positive effect of television in a concrete way.

In addition, television produces happiness or laugh.According to the latest record,it can be learned that there are thousands upon thousands people focus on basketball,and it is definitely exciting to watch a fabulous game with some friends together on television.When Kobe shows slum dunk,Kidd plays fascinating skills,people shout and become so happy,they can't help to cheer or applause.Also,some programmes,like Mr.Bean or Just fo Laugh,always make me laugh,that means television affect our motions.If our live are full of happniess or laugh,it will be more easier to communicate with others,and give numerous contributions to our society.

We have discussed problems concering that television has had a mostly positive effect on society.However,not all of their effects are good.In fact,negative influences are often showed in the wrong imitating of the youth.For instance,most of young criminals made their mistakes by watching the television programmes full of violence,sex and discrimination.Nevertheless,these unexpected circumstance can be healed via the supervisory organization,limited or forbided some harmful parts of the television programmes.

Taking into account of all these effects,we may reach the conclusion that television has had a mostly positive effect on our society.In short,television influences on people's behaivor,mood,and simultaneously gives positive effect to our society.Anyway,I can't imagine the world without television,it must be boring.