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题目是OG上的 reading将的是利他主义 听力材料从动物和人去反驳的

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In the lecture the professor holds the opposite opinion appear in the reading. The professor cast doubt on whether human and animals do that sacrifice themselves truly for helping others. The following reasons that he raises in the lecture is provided to support his points

Firstly, he argues that animals which guard for others always fed themselves full not just as the reading says they sacrifice their chances for food to guard others. The same phenomenon in this animal's preying time demonstrates it. When encounter danger situation and then alarm others to escape not they don't mean to protect others from danger, on the contrary that make themselves easily to get out of danger.

In addition the so-called self sacrifice happens to human beings. The professor claim that people donate their organ to relatives or strangers also in somewhat gain their reward.

As a conclusion, professor's option is directly contradicts what reading passage indicate. He believes that the action of animals and human beings is out of their own benefits. Maybe sometime it looks like for others apparently but actually not.

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