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Qualities of good parents

The issue what are qualities of good parents is a controversial one. Facing this question, a hundred people presents a hundred answer depending on different personal experience, individual preference and personal types. From my perspective, there are three important characteristic that indicate whether a person is a good parent or not.

To begin with, good parents should trust their children. In this high tempo society, there are too many differences between two generations. We may have different idea about how to deal with problem, different value system and goal of life. When suffering with a problem, we have various attitude. Therefore, it is inevitable to have some discussions or arguments. As far as I concern, a good parent should trust that children can deal with this issue by themselves. No matter success or failure, children can learn a lot from this experience. Furthermore, trust also means respect.

To such a paramount point, another must be added. Good parent should obtain a sense of humor. Although in childhood, to a certain extent, boys and girls are undergo pressure from study and other aspects of life. A comfortable atmosphere of family is a optimal avenue for all family member to relax and relief the pressure after a whole day stressful working and studying. It is especially for children who are too young and have less experience about how to facing embarrassments we may usually meet in daily life. A family with humorous parents is essential for children’s growing.

Besides, parents’ encouragements are also crucial for children. As I mentioned before, we have to face a lot of problem. Children are also obliged to undergo the failure resulted from those issues. They may lost confidences and fail to face the difficulties. Encouragements for parents are the most important support for us to go through those dark periods in our life.

It is time to come to concluded, good parents should trust their children, encourage them and being humorous.

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too many different  这里的different 应该是difference, 文章里的different用的较频繁，试着换别的同义词，

When suffer with a problem 语法错误，应该是suffering

successful or failure 这里的successful是形容词，failure是名词

trust also means respective.  这里应该是respect吧，

最后一段我觉得再扩充一下比较好，比如这样写：

In conclusion, good parents should trust their children, which can make the kids gain much experience and respect. Except that, possessing humour is crucial for good parent, which can releace their children form the pressure that coming form difficulty and hardship. And It's helpful by encouraging their kids.

一点拙见

太感谢了,我已经基本改过了

那你觉得这个大概能得多少分呢?

 我不会判分，呵呵

还是谢谢你啊

你是第一个在这个论坛上和我说话的人~~~~~~~~~~

lz应该注意下名词单复数。

还有，我个人建议类似Facing this question, a hundred people presents a hundred answer depending on different personal experience, individual preference and personal types.少说