急!请xdjm帮助:作文JJ的范文及一个改写问题

124. The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Carlo’s Clothing to the staff. “Since Disc Depot, the music store on the next block, began a new radio advertising campaign last year, its business has grown dramatically, as evidenced by the large increase in foot traffic into the store. While the Disc Depot’s owners have apparently become wealthy enough to retire, profits at Carlo’s Clothing have remained stagnant for the past three years. In order to boost our sales and profits, we should therefore switch from newspaper advertising to frequent radio advertisements like those for Disc Depot.”

Carlo's服饰老板给员工的备忘录： 由于Disc Depot，相邻街区的音像店从去年开始新的电台广告，它的业务显著增长，从商店人流量的大量增加就可以看出。当Disc Depot的老板显然已经足够富有可以退休时，Carlo's服饰的利润3年来一直停滞不变。为了促进我们的销售和利润，我们应该像DiscDepot一样从报纸广告转向经常的电台广告.

Conclusion： Carlo’s Clothing will likewise be able to promote sales and increase profits if Carlo’s Clothing give up newspaper advertising and begin frequent radio advertisements as Disc Depot do.

125. The following appeared as part of the business plan of the Capital Idea investment firm. “Across town in the Park Hill district, the Thespian Theater, Pizzazz Pizza, and the Niblick Golf Club have all had business increases within the past two years. Capital Idea should therefore invest in the Roxy Playhouse, the Slice-o’-Pizza, and the Divot Golf Club, three new businesses in the Irongate district. As a condition, we should require them to participate in a special program: Any customer who patronizes two of the businesses will receive a substantial discount at the third. By motivating customers to patronize all three, we will thus contribute to the profitability of each and maximize our return.”

Capital Idea投资公司的商业计划： 在ParkHill区的Thespian剧院，Pizzazz比萨，Niblick高尔夫俱乐部在过去2年都有业务增长。因此Capital Idea应该投资Poxy剧场，Slic－o比萨和Divot高尔夫俱乐部这3家新的Irongate区的企业。为使他们达到条件，我们应该要求他们参加特殊的项目：任何顾客在其中两家消费将在第三家得到折扣。通过刺激顾客在所有3家店消费，我们将增进每一家的利润，从而使我们的回报最大化。

1、 这两篇本月JJ的范文在224范文那个文件里有吗，请知道的XDJM提示下编号，如果没有，请帮忙贴一下范文啊。

2、 124题的conclusion我那样改写行吗？一战作文分狂低，辅导老师说是E-RATE判定我照抄原文，我的困惑是：如果只用同义词替代（一战我就这个方法），那被判抄袭；如果把句式改了（124这个例子），那就改变了原句的合理意思和重心，这是SC里认定的错误啊。应该用哪个方法啊？请NN示范下124conclusion改写吧！

作文令我抓狂，咳

写AA的话,建议你去看看七宗罪.

另外,尽量不要把原文的话改一改就拿来用或者直接COPY,尽量用你的话去阐述它的意思.而且不要把SC的那套带到写作里.你该怎么写就怎么做.

七宗罪我可以倒背了,咳,我现在怀疑一战就是改写太少被怀疑是抄袭原文,直接判了死刑

请教MM,这两篇范文哪里找得到呢?