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What will you buy if you have enough money, a house or a business?  I have been asked to answer this question for many times, my choice is always the same: a house.  Many people who have the different opinion from me will think it hard to understand.  But I think the choice is determined by your own life pursue and personalities.  I would like to share my choice reasons in the followings:

First of all, having my own warm house and living with my dearest families happily is my life pursue.  I was born and educated in a conservative family.  When I was young, my parents always told me their childhood experience, some details impressed me deeply: when they were young, China was suffering a heavy adversity, many people were force to leave their hometown for living.  A warm house and abundant food were a remote dream and life pursue for them.  Such affection also influenced me much.  In my mind, to have my own house and live with my families healthy and happily is the most important thing for me.

Secondly, my own house gives me a private place to relax and entertain my friends.  I am a girl who has many interests, such as yoga, cooking and reading.  If I have my own house, I can empty some place for yoga exercise and practice new cooking methods regardless others’ feeling.  At the same time, I can cook delicious food and invite my friends to have a wonderful weekend in my house.
                

The biggest reason why I want a house is the sense of safety to own a house.  House means a lot to me: it is a place to sleep, it is a place you can go even you lose any other things.  However, to own a business would put me to the edge of crisis feeling.  I would worry about the money I loss everyday and I would never appreciate the things I have.  I don’t think business would bring me peace and happy life which I am pursuing.  

Now you know why I am so insist on having a house instead of my own business.  I am a traditional woman with my private dream: to have a lovely baby and dearest husband living in a warm house for my life long.

呵呵，没有什么特别原因哦，就这样写了

是不是把最big的写在前面会比较好？