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18. “If the primary duty and concern of a corporation is to make money, then conflict is inevitable when the corporation must also acknowledge a duty to serve society.”

From your perspective, how accurate is the above statement? Support your position with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

It is a controversial questions whether the primary duty and concern of a corporation is to make money conflicts with its acknowledgement of a duty to serve society. Some people assert that these two factors are contradictory to each other, while others contend that they have some positive relations. In my perspective, the primary duty and concern of a corporation to a great extent conflicts its objective to serve society.

First, company with profit-goal enevitably will boast its products so that customers cannot judge the authentic value of it. For example, many people will complain that they buy something with little value just because the manufacturers boast myriads of advantages of their products on promotion. Therefore, in this aspect, the company's action degrades the trust of the customers.

Second, company pursuing high profits always manufactures the products on the cost of polluting the surrounding area. Take a place in my hometown for instance, the company is reputed for its shampoo brands in the area, but it is also well known for its heavy pollution because all the wastes generated from manufacturing are discharged to the neighboring river. The noise also exerts a negative effect on the study and life of the residents. In this sense, the company greatly does harm to the society.

Third, company pursuing high profits will inevitably takes every effort to reduce its cost. The most direct way is to layoff the current staffs, resulting in the unemployment. The unemployment will finally bring about many other problems such as crime. Thus, it causes the instability of the society.

Of course, we cannot deny that high profits means high tax payment and the government will have more revenue to grant subsidy to those people in need.

From the above analysis, we can clearly judge that the negative effects that pursuing high profits bring to the society greatly outweigh its positive effects, therefore we can reach a conclusion that "if the primary duty and concern of a corporation is to make money, then conflict is inevitable when the corporation must also acknowledge a duty to serve society."

It is a controversial questions whether the primary duty and concern of a corporation is to make money conflicts with its acknowledgement of a duty to serve society. Some people assert that these two factors are contradictory to each other, while others contend that they have some positive relations. In my perspective, the primary duty and concern of a corporation to a great extent conflicts its objective to serve society.

First, company with profit-goal enevitably （inevitably） will boast its products so that customers cannot judge the authentic value of it. For example, many people will complain that they buy something with little value just because the manufacturers boast myriads of advantages of their products on promotion. Therefore, in this aspect, the company's action degrades the trust of the customers.

Second, company pursuing high profits always manufactures the products on the cost of polluting the surrounding area. Take a place in my hometown for instance, the company is reputed for its shampoo brands in the area, but it is also well known for its heavy pollution because all the wastes generated from manufacturing are discharged to the neighboring river. The noise also exerts a negative effect on the study and life of the residents. In this sense, the company greatly does harm to the society.

Third, company pursuing high profits will inevitably takes every effort to reduce its cost. The most direct way is to layoff the current staffs, resulting in the unemployment. The unemployment will finally bring about many other problems such as crime. Thus, it causes the instability of the society.

Of course, we cannot deny that high profits means high tax payment and the government will have more revenue to grant subsidy to those people in need.

From the above analysis, we can clearly judge that the negative effects that pursuing high profits bring to the society greatly outweigh its positive effects, therefore we can reach a conclusion that "if the primary duty and concern of a corporation is to make money, then conflict is inevitable when the corporation must also acknowledge a duty to serve society."

楼主写的很不错啊，观点很充分，三个清晰的主观点，加上一个让步观点，用词之类的错误，语法方面句子结构方面也没什么错误。意思也表达得很清楚。

不过感觉上，你可以在字数上多加一点，现在只有348字，觉得可以在表达每个论点的时候，多写一两句话，虽然楼主已经把观点表达的很清楚了，但觉得可以更上一层楼，例如在那个让步的观点上，作者再可以加一句话之类的，把字数弄成400左右，至少在长相上更趋于高分。这样岂不是更好