第一篇TWE, 97年10月，欢迎大家提意见修改

今天是第一次写作文，在文本里面写的，掐着时间写的，拼写错误一大堆：( 还有啊，不知道为啥，在题库里找不到这个题目，估计是比较老了，已经删除了！郁闷，第一次写居然写了这一篇。anyway,既然写了就不怕献丑，欢迎大家多提意见啊！

题目：one of your friends has saved a certain amount of money. He/she wants to use the money to buy a car or go travelling. What do you think is better for her/him to do? Why? Please give specific reasons.

One of my friends Liky has just saved a certain amount of money. She wants to use the money to buy a car or go travelling. Different people hold different opions due to their distinct background and experience. But as far as i am conerned, I think go oversea travlling with her husband will be a better choice. My reasons are as below.

Firstly, Taking a long vacation and going travelling will give lily a good relaxation and she can go back to work more vitally. After long time stressful work in office and continuous negeotions with customers, the new enviroment and beautiful scenary are also a good reward and recognition for lily herself. She will think all the hard work deserves her effort and have a fresh attitude to began work. At the same time, oversea traelling will broden her experience and vision.

Secondly, travelling will bring more exciting moments and new friends to lily's lives. It's especially good for lily's marriage. Only Relaxation, excitments and careness between her and her husband will ignite new flame between them, without other people's interruption, any worries or trival things. It's also a good time to commucate more in a peaceful way and understand each other more to finally enhance the quality of their
lives. At the same time, during the travelling, they can recognize new friends with same experience.

Last but not least, Maybe the car will bring some convenient to lily,Buying a car in such a easily jamed city as Beijing is not as useful as lily imagined.  Also she needs to pay more money to maintain and run the car every month and much effort to care the car to keep it in good condition.     

To sum up, even buying a car seems to have some attraction, I suggest that lily go travelling not only to award and relex herself, but also improve the understanding and love bwtween her and her husband. At the same time, they will both broaden their vision and experience and avoid more expense in the future.

1，第一句最好改写一下原文。

2，注意文中大小写。

3，多用连词！连词！！这是计分的重要标准

4，结构不错，继续努力！