[求助]请大哥大姐们帮忙改作文一篇

In our lives, we certainly have a lot of friends. And we not only spend our time in palying with them, but also spend our time in studying or working with them. But in fact some people just perfer to spend time with one or two colse friedns, while some one else, like me, prefer to spend time with a large number of friends.

Fiistly, a large number of friends can bring me more fun. For example, when I have a birthday party, I'd like to invite as many as possible friends to come.We can sing, can dance and can play other games together.We will enjoy ourselves very much.It is not a  party only, furthermore, it is an opportunity to gather friends together to communicate.But if there are noly one or two friends, we will not have such a funny party, just because the party's atmosphere is scare.

Secondly, a large number of friends can bring me more information. Our world improves so fast that it is surrounded by a lot of information. In order to work or study well, we must pick up as much as information as we can.But there are so many ways we can choose. Bisides geting information from books or from internet, a better way to go is to get information from ous friends. The more friends, the more infromation we can have. Our friends can  give us different information as they come from different job positons.But if ther are only one or two colse friends,the way of getting infromation is narrow.

Last, a large number of friends can bring me more advices and ways of solving problems. Friends together should help each other.When we face with difficulties, friends will give us their advices.So we can make a decision after we get the advices from friends.Or when we think just in one way, friends may point out another way of thinking. Then we can expose our thinking. When I was a stuednt, I'd like to study with a lot of friends. We discussed the problem in many ways. It helps me a lot when I am older.It lets me konw that one person's thought just represente one thing, and we should get more ideas and ways to solve the problen.Then we can find out a best way.But if we just spend time wtih one or two close friends, our customs may change in a same way .So there is no new ideas among us.

All in all, in my opinion, spending time with a large number of friends is more fanny and useful than with one or two friends.More friends will bring me more funny,more information, more advieces and more ways of solving problems.

写得不错。在以下几个方面可以提高：

1，去掉一些中国的表达。第一段尤为明显。注意英语是怎么表转折的

2，句式，词汇多样化，比如尼2，3，4段首句都有large number of friends....

3，注意拼写

祝你进步

谢谢斑竹评论.

这是小妹初次写作文,很多地方还欠缺.

你说指出的地方我会注意的.

再次感谢!