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Local newspapers have reported that a new high school will be built in our community. Hearing this news, some people fell unhappy because it may cause this little become more and more crowed, while others think that building a high school in our community which has only a high school has more advantages and support the building of the new high school. As for me, a student in the unique college, strongly agree with the latter. The argument for this view goes as follows.

A new high school will bring us much knowledge sources such as professors and a library, both of which will give us more opportunities to turn to for solving these problems we confront with in everyday life. The unique high school we have had is a art school, so there are many problems, such as air pollution and water pollution, that it can solve and we should turn to other universities far from our community for help which usually takes our much time and money. So if the new high school having a major of environment engineering will built in our community, we could solve these problems more easily than turning to other universities. Moreover, when a new high school built, there must be a big library with many books. Therefore, many children in our community would go to the library study instead of playing in the crowed streets where may be very dangerous.

On the other hand, the new high school will bring us many job opportunities which will benefit those who have lost his job. As we all know that many people in our community lose jobs several \years ago due to the big economic reform, therefore, it essential for our government creating opportunities for such people find jobs again. After a high school built, lots of students from other parts of our country will come and live in our community, which eventually followed by many other facilities, such as cafeterias, shops and restaurants etc. These is no doubt that such facilities would give us many job opportunities and help our government solve the problem I mentioned above.

Admittedly, a new high school will cause our community much more crowed. However, the advantages of building a new high school counts over the drawbacks because it not only help us solve problems but also bring us many job opportunities. So I strongly agree that build a new high school in our community.      

Local newspapers have reported that a new high school will be built in our community. Hearing this news, some people fell unhappy because it may cause this little become more and more crowed, while others think that building a high school in our community which has only a high school has more advantages and support the building of the new high school. As for me, a student in the unique college, 缺个主语I strongly agree with the latter. The argument for this view goes as follows.

A new high school will bring us much（many） knowledge sources such as professors and a library, both of which will give us more opportunities to turn to for solving these problems we confront with in everyday life(有点怪，to which we can turn when encounting problems in everyday life). The unique high school we have had is a art school, so there are many problems, such as air pollution and water pollution, that it can solve and we should turn to other universities far from our community for help which usually takes our much time and money. 看不太懂，长句有问题，试着先分解一下。So if the new high school having a major of environment engineering will (be)built in our community, we could solve these problems more easily than turning to other universities. Moreover, when a new high school (is)built, there must be a big library with many books. Therefore, many children in our community would go to the library study instead of playing in the crowed streets where may be very dangerous.

On the other hand, the new high school will bring us many job opportunities which will benefit those who have lost his job. As we all know that many people in our community lose jobs several \years ago due to the big economic reform, therefore, it essential for our government creating（to create） opportunities for such people find jobs again. After a high school (is)built, lots of students from other parts of our country will come and live in our community, which (would be)eventually followed by many other facilities, such as cafeterias, shops and restaurants etc. These is no doubt that such facilities would give us many job opportunities and help our government solve the problem I mentioned above.

Admittedly, a new high school will cause our community much more crowed. However, the advantages of building a new high school counts over the drawbacks because it not only help us solve problems but also bring us many job opportunities. So I strongly agree that build a new high school in our community.