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xhbhxhbh · 发表于 2014-5-28 21:18:58

5.28
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to reduce air pollution is for the government to raise the cost of fuel(petrol).
People nowadays  are attaching more importance to the issue of environment pollution ,especially  the air pollution. Only thinking the haze in Beijing , you can imagine the seriousness of  air pollution. In order to cope with this problem , some holds that the best way to reduce air pollution is for the government to raise the cost of fuel. According the the principle of economics , price increase will lead to demand decrease , which will defenitely less the waste gas into the open air. Some other people , including me think that this is an unwise decision .

  Adimittly, raise the price of the cost will decrease the consume of fuel , but we have to recognise that it only has effect on part of the people who using private cars as transportation---the more poor people , for people who are have large sum of money , the cost never stop their using of cars.Since people has accustomed to commute by cars , they will use some other cheap fuel , say  diesel , to fuel their cars ,which would pollute the air more seriously. In addition , the increase in the cost may lead to some  extra influences on people's life.We all know that the link between petrol price and world economy is becoming increasing close , any littlt bit change in energy price will lead big fluctuations in the world economy .The war between America and Irap has caused the supply of oil decrease and increase in oil price, this obviously casue numerous effect on the other countries. Furthremore, since  petrol is the raw material of many other products , the cost will unavoidable transfer to ennormous other consumptions , which will end up with inflation ,it is the last thing we want to see.

In fact ,to reduce air pollution ,it is vital to know as much as possible what attributes to air pollution , without this knowledge
we can only resolve part of the problem , and we will fail to solute the question completely.Perhaps , the buring of fuel,may contribute to only a small part of the pollution , and there are many other pollutants ,such as industrial gas . The past 30 years witnessed the rapid economic growth of China , however it also witnessed the air condition from bad to worse , since so many manufactures set up in China, and most of them run day and night ,never stop pouring industrial gas into the air. And it is obvious that only through governing of industrial gas will  the fresh air come back,haze gone.As individual , we should also contribute ourself to the air cleaning program , say , we can use public transportation as much as possible ,and  planting more trees is also preferred.

From the  discussion above , I,closely  adhere to to the point that raising the cost of fuel is an unwise way to reduce air pollution .It only solute the problem partially and it will lead to other disasters. To prevent air pollution , we should first find out the main reasons leading to the pollution, and second , make joint and feasible efforts to overcome it !

xhbhxhbh · 发表于 2014-5-29 20:28:20

5.29
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.Although science and technology will continue to improve , the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place.

These days , great changes have taken place in every corner of the world , it is more convenient  for us to contact anyone in any place.It is obvious that  this great change should attribute to the development of science and technology, though it will continut to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place.

  Adimittedly, some areas,  say the rural areas in China , are not as development as urban areas, where the supply of water and power is  still a problem, and even people are striving  for three meals of a day.In addition , in the city , however  , there comes a mount of other problems , such as traffice congestion. Take my self as a example ,during commuter time it will take extra an hour to get home,not to mention holidays , when  more people come to vistit ,and a terrible traffic is the result . Though there are so many things I want to complain about the life , when take a deep consideration , I still want to say  that the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives  have already taken place.

I  still remember  a year ago  when I　travell  from Xiamen to Shenzhen ,it took me 12 hours  on a regular train, whereas now it only take me less than 4 hours taking a high-speed rail train. Science and technology continut to improve , making  our travells increasingly convenient . What's more , there are also lage quantity  of improvement in the medical technology, the latest anesthetic technique largely decrease the pain  of patients during surgery . It is undeniable that incurable disease still exist , but the medical techonlogy indeed do as much as possible to relive people , and  cure  tremendous of patients every year, enable them to live happily with their families. There is no reason we reject the saying that  significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place.

The most significant improvement , my personal perspective alone , is the Internet. The 21st century has witnessed the great efficiency it brings. If you will,  you can go shopping in the nearby shopping mall , or shopping online , which not only cut the time spending on  shopping but also avoid huge bulk of goods taken by ourselves , because a lot of express  will do that for you .With the Internet it also make the communication between individuals more faster. Last Friday , I use skype to communicate with one of my best friend in American ,it is the excellent internet that reduce the distance between us .It is no doubt that great changes have already taken place today , and will continue in the future .

To sum up , I definitely adhere to the point that the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place, and with that improvement of science and technology will have even bigger enhencment to people's everyday life.

xhbhxhbh · 发表于 2014-5-30 20:42:46

5.30
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone.

My answer:

These days, with the economic progress ceaselessly , there leaves mountainous jobs for  us to cope with , making the already hectic life from bad to worse. To survive these stress and grab truly relax, some choose to stay all themselves, to listen to a piece of music or to go some places for example. Whereas , as for me , and a lot of other people choose to share with somebody else.

Maybe , for some people the stay alone really do a lot good for them . One of my classmate , for instance , when she wants to truly relax herself , she always stay all by herself , I do run across her some time , caughting her listening to music and putting sad facial expression on her face, minutes  later , a happy girl returns as I come across her again  in the canteen . Sometimes it's a little bit of shame to share some stress with others , and many people try to calm down all by themselves, and it does work in many situations, however , to reduce stress ,doctors may suggest you to speak out  or share your problems with  them if not your reliable friends .And from the perspective of health alone I strongly reject to stay alone ,when trying to truly relax and reduce stress.

I am not of woman seeking for social interactions a lot , but I still want to tell to some others when I confront with huge pressures, not to mention the sociable ones. Apart from stay alone, there are so many other means you can use to relax and reduce stress. When I am down, I always give a call to my friend ,sometimes  complain about the bad whether in my city , sometimes about the mountainous home work, there are so many times  we together transfer a compliant talk to a happy one. Thus , talking to friends is a good methods , especially for me . What's more , if the situation is really serious , I strongly suggest you go to see a psychology doctor .The pressures in our society not only give birth to the vacation but also stimulus its progress ,within contemporary , it's all but embarrass to see a psychology doctor. And if you stay alone , mostly  the situation will go beyond control ,and the large number of people commit suicide ,can justify .

Admittedly , there exists the situation , where it's unproper to say these things to our friends, even in this situation , you can say it to your doctors  ,or your parents , whatever things are , they are always there , leaving an open ear for you  , for it's your visit , doctors making money ,and it's  deeply love your parents have for you .So why not take a minute to speak out and get a full strength for tomorrow! (482)

e23lzh · 发表于 2014-5-31 14:00:56

http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-898022-1-1.html
这是写作小分队的规则，你要去占座的，占座了就会有人给你改了。

大概看了你最后一篇文章，问题还是比较大的。有好几处明显语法错误，包括One of my classmate，这是个主语，你的整个句子里面友多于一个主语。另外，一些单词感觉用的很奇怪，估计是你从词典里面查到了就直接粘进来了吧，比如mountainous这个指的是having many mountains (of a region)，用来形容job明显驴唇不对马嘴啊。另外，很多处词性错误，如truly relax，truly为副词，relax是名词，是不可以用来修饰的。
我就大概说一说，没太有时间帮你改，你去参加这个小分队的活动吧。

xhbhxhbh · 发表于 2014-5-31 22:55:57

5.31
Do you agree or disagree: Technology designed to make people's live simpler but make people's lives more complicated

It is a highly debated issue whether the technology, intended to make people's life simpler, make people's lives more complicated. This topic can be approached from several angles due to its complexity. While some people tend to think it by no means a easy to cope with things now than the past , others seem to disagree with it . Deeply deliberating over the issue, I believe that  thchnology make people's life all but complicated ,and the following discussion reveals my stand and reasoning.

To start with , it is undeniable that there applied so many technology into  today's everyday life ,you can see many ATMs around you nearly everywhere .It'll make sense , you could say that , it's easier for the one with bad intentions to deceive us ; the flyers stick near to a ATM maybe an vicious one , and  sometimes it'll make us lose money .But take a deep consideration , we can deposit and withdraw money as soon as possible , and you can skip, say the long queue in the bank ,thus cutting down the time  you spend depositing and withdrawing money . Another example ,  you can purchase goods with a card  instead of money , and it is really convenient for us ,for taking  a large sum  of money is definitely unsafe thing .What's more ,in the business word , there also exist a big story to tell. In a word , it is undoubtedly  to say that , the technology really make our life simpler.

In addition , it is with the high-tech ,not only save us a lot of time , money , and it even helps us get rid of distress .Take myself for example , last year it took me more than 12 hours from Xiamen to Shenzhen in a regular train ,but now it only take no more than 4 hours by  the  high speed rail train. I have to say that it  really brings me convenience a lot , nothing complicated . Furthermore, the development of Internet , especially online shipping , liberate a number of people from roaming a real shopping mall , and avoid a exhaust body .Again , it is by no means a complicated one. And the medical world has another big story to tell, the latest enhancement has made the surgery more tolerable and it really cures  a lot more people from even the most complexity diseases , say cancer , my friend's mother caught in caner  2 years ago , but with the advancement medical treatment , a healthy aunt returns .Thus , it is no reason to say our life more complicated, it really save us a lot time money and even make a happier life for us all.

To put it into a nutshell, though it may sound reasonable that many complained that the complicated system in the bank , stores , and even the software in the computer is so complicate to manipulate , though there indeed exist so much shortcomings .but I can still conclude safely that ,the advantages outweighs its disadvantages. (515)

Jack0114 · 发表于 2014-7-4 09:27:23

LZ好多明显的低级语法错误啊, 而且遣词造句的功底很差。

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