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27. People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Agree or disagree?

This debate has long time been in the limelight. Someone think people need not do things that they do not like doing, but other ones believe that people sometimes should do things that they do not enjoy doing. After pondering two sides of the debate, I deem that the second view is much more appreciated, and even all of the following reasons support me.

The first is that we can not always do things that we want to do, because some other factors such as people surrounding us and social responsibilities will affect us. Children enjoy playing games that they want to do, but they have limited time to play, they should do studies which they think tedious. The same as the children, adults also enjoy playing games and they always have much wok to do, so they have no time to play the games. If they spend much time to play the games, they may not complete their work, so their boss may shout at them and their payment will be subtracted.

The other is that sometimes something which must be done is not the thing you enjoy doing. Supposing you are a company manager, one day you should fire someone who disobeys the company’s regulations, but he is your friend. Considering your friendship you want to help him and you also should obey the regulations, at this site, I think you should do the thing firing him that you do not enjoy doing.

Last but not the least, something you do not enjoy now days you can not say you do not like it forever, someday you may love it. For example, you may think dancing is boring and you almost can not understand why your friends fan in it. When they invite you to dance, you always feel awful. After you go with them one more time, you may fall in love it, and then you request your friends to go with you.

Considering what I have illustrate above, we can not always do things that we want to do, sometimes something which must be done is not the thing you enjoy doing, and something you do not enjoy now days you can not say you do not like it forever, I believe that People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing.

27. People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Agree or disagree?

This debate has long time been in the limelight. Someone think people need not do things that they do not like doing, but other ones believe that people sometimes should do things that they do not enjoy doing. After pondering two sides of the debate, I deem that the second view is much more appreciated, and even all of the following reasons support me.

首段简单复述TOPIC无可厚非，但这是给出一个观点让你选择支持还是反对的话题，不是两个观点选其一，所以把TOPIC复述成两个立场有些牵强，尤其debate用的蹊跷，topic里并没有体现debate.可以考虑的方式是论述一个观点的正反两面，然后择其一。比如：It's undeniable that doing things one enjoys is much easier than doing those one does not enjoy. ........ However, in life it is impossible only do what we want to do, and , in the long run, the things you do not enjoy now do not necessarily mean you won't enjoy them forever.

这是根据你下面理由段总结的首句，方式上是先把对立面的优势指出来，然后表明你的态度，同时给出线索你下面将主要论述的理由是什么。具体内容需要你自己去改，我只做个示范。（in the long run那里我本来想加一句有些事情长期看值得做，但是你的理由里没有，所以可以划掉）

The first is that we can not always do things that we want to do, because some other factors such as people surrounding us and social responsibilities will affect us. （段首topic sentence 可以这样写，但分成两句以后理由没有突出出来。合在一起好些：the first reason why we can not always do what we want to do is that some other factors may affact us. The people surrounding us and social responsibilities will sometimes deprive us from doing that. For example,)Children enjoy playing games that they want to do, but they have limited time to play, they should do studies which they think tedious. (前面这句句式过于简单，而且逻辑没有表达清楚。Children enjoy... but they have to... because time is limited...)The same as the children, adults also enjoy playing games and they always have much wok to do, so they have no time to play the games. If they spend much time to play the games, they may not complete their work, so their boss may shout at them and their payment will be subtracted.(这句也是同样问题，有些句子可以改从句。Adults also enjoy... but the time is limited and they always have too much work to do, if they insist... they may not... ,which could result in .... and ....)

这段总的感觉是支持内容与段主题句不十分相关，两个例子都主要在说时间有限，与主题所说周围环境或人的影响不很切题。如果这样可以直接把主题换成：the time is limited and we always have some obligations which are far more important than ....

The other is that sometimes something which must be done is not the thing you enjoy doing. Supposing you are a company manager, one day you should fire someone who disobeys the company’s regulations, but he is your friend. Considering your friendship you want to help him and you also should obey the regulations, at this site, I think you should do the thing firing him that you do not enjoy doing.
这段的主题句与上段主题句看起来没有明显区别，有两种可能，一是句子顺序有问题，没有把理由突出出来，让人感觉不到你在强调什么。二是，句子本身意思含糊，没有把理由说清楚。后一个原因是与上段主题句一样的问题，没有把你要阐述的理由抽象出来表达清楚，与后面支持内容联系不是很紧密，按你后面举的例子，这句的主题可以归纳成：rules or regulations that we have to follow and obey may require .....

Last but not the least, something you do not enjoy now days you can not say you do not like it forever, someday you may love it. For example, you may think dancing is boring and you almost can not understand why your friends fan in it. When they invite you to dance, you always feel awful. After you go with them one more time, you may fall in love it, and then you request your friends to go with you.(这里and then用的不太合适，如果是延续动作，后面这句完全可以不要。如果是为了加强效果，可以加表强调的副词，比如even)

上面这段不细说了，主要的问题还是在句式上。过多的简单句叠加会显得幼稚，简单句的多次重复也会暴露出词汇的不足。另外如果用简单句就必须要保证逻辑非常清楚，使用恰当的连接词，不然不足以体现简单句简单有力的优势。

Considering what I have illustrate above, we can not always do things that we want to do, sometimes something which must be done is not the thing you enjoy doing, and something you do not enjoy now days you can not say you do not like it forever, I believe that People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing.

尾段是典型的总结式，但是和首段一样的问题，只是简单重复。实际稍微改两个词或者换个句式就感觉好得多，至少保证不是直接COPY各段首句，避免在这里丢分。

总的来说这篇文章写的已经很好了，全文读起来很顺畅，尤其各段的支持理由都比较好。需要加强的主要是两个方面：一是首段和各段主题的归纳能力。宁可支持内容含糊，主题绝对不能含糊。如果确实不知道怎么写，就先想好支持内容，然后根据内容来定主题。二是句式还需要多些变化，需要加强从句和连接词的运用。其他基本都没问题，注意检查有可能引起争议的时态和词的用法。另外准备几个替换词，至少需要对那些与主题密切相关，需要多次重复的简单词语要进行替换。