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[作文互改] issue 24 求拍~~听说标题要取得长才会有人去点我不是很相信所以这次我就试试把标题写的长一点

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发表于 2012-3-7 20:02:23 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with
the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or
might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

35'

Due to the explosive development of the world today, it has been more and more people focusing on the issue about education. When it comes to the topic that what is the best way to teach people, some hold opionion that they should praise positive actions, while others pay more attention about negatives. In this issue, however, the speaker claims that the best way to teach is to praise positive actions while ignore negative ones at all, which I can hardly agree with. As far as I am concerned, both factors should not be ignored thus they should be treated equally.

Admittedly, encouraging one's good behavior will enhance a person's confidence and therefore he or she will be more likely to do the things which their teachers or parents praise. If the one's actions are like the growth of a flower, those praises will be equal to rain that falls from the sky. Rain makes flowers to grow much better and healthier, and also helps flowers to be much more beautiful. Without rain, flowers will lack of water and hence be withered. The function of rain is just as the praise to the people. Moreover, if we always focus on one's negative actions, it is very likely that this person will have negative mentality such as some mental problems and even do something that will be harmful to others. And we have heared too many tragedies about this kind of problem.

However, the importance of praising, as we discuss above, doesn't mean that we should ignore negative side. If we overestimate the issue about praising as well as magnify its importance, without pointing out the defects that one has, these people will be too much self-confidence and haughty, who can only receive other's praise, yet can not bear other's critism, which can also hamper one's development. The reason why we point out the problems that these people have, is that we want them realizing how badly they have done or what is the problem about their doing, rather than just critisize them in an unreasonable way. Thus, pointing out one's negative actions does not mean that it will have a negative influence, but it will teach them how to be a better person.

Finally, I think the goal of teaching, rather than offering them some basic knowledge, is to tell people how to behave well in a society, as it is the fundamental value of education. And in this issue, both praising and critisizing are the two factors that help one to construct his mind.  So a good teacher or parent should treat these two factors equally and also use them in a correct way. And I think a better way for teaching is that giving their encouragement, while also warming them in a mild way, which means we should tell them both aspects their actions are. If we teach people in this way, I believe that most of these people will have their value to the society in the future.

Based on the discussion above, the speaker's claim that the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones is somehow inaccurate. And in the final analyse, I think both factors are equally important and thus we should use these factors in a proper way in our teaching.
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沙发
发表于 2012-3-7 22:42:16 | 只看该作者
写得不错,结构很好,思路比较清晰
板凳
发表于 2012-3-8 17:19:13 | 只看该作者
很好,这样的作文我看至少有4分吧。继续努力!
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-8 18:06:09 | 只看该作者
谢谢普渡哥!
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-8 18:09:51 | 只看该作者
感谢竹林版主能给予这么高的评价,issue能有4分就已经相当满意了。只是时间还是长了点,我也会加紧练习的。
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