【求狂拍】Topic135 老师布置作业那篇……算是第一篇完整的argument了吧

jm444862668 · 发表于 2012-1-29 14:32:32

Topic135
The Department of Education in the state of Attra recommends that high school students be assigned homework every day. Yet a recent statewide survey of high school math and science teachers(1) calls the usefulness of daily homework into question. In the district of Sanlee, 86 percent of the teachers reported assigning homework three to five times a week, whereas in the district of Marlee(6), less than 25 percent of the teachers reported assigning homework three to five times a week(2). Yet the students in Marlee earn better grades overall and are less likely to be required to repeat a year of school(3) than are the students in Sanlee(4,5,9). Therefore, all teachers in our high schools shouldassign homework no more than twice(7) a week(8), if at all.

In this argument, the writer employs an incomplete evidences concerning the frequency of homework Marlee’s and Sanlee’s teacher assigned, including the final grade of Marlee’s and Sanlee’s students, to argue that Sanlee’s teacher should require less assignment like Marlee’s . We may accept part of the writer’s claims regarding homework’s frequency in two areas, but in the absence of some critical evidence, we cannot accept the conclusion that all teachers in Sanlee should reduce their requirement of assignment.

The result of the survey lacks credibility because the arguer fails to include teachers in other subject. The data of the survey only comes out from science and math teachers. Different courses require different methods of teaching. For example, the science of law needs students recites many terms and rules to do a good job. On the contrary, to a students of math and science, understand what they have learn is the most important thing. Therefore, it depends on which subject student take to decide whether or not frequency homework is necessary. The argument falsely selective a definite discipline of teachers and excluded others which lead to incredibility of the survey.

Secondly, by making the comparison of the frequency of homework in Sanlee and Marlee, the arguer assume that Marlee'sstudents get better grades. However, it is entire possible that the total amount of homework in Marlee is much more than in Sanlee. Perhaps Marlee's teachers require one or two academic thesis a week, but Sanlee's teachers just ask for a few of practices after classes. Even if assignment is in same level, the arguer fails to provide enough information of the assessment criteria is equal in both places. It is possible that Marlee's examination is easier than Sanlee.

In addition, the adviser fails to establish the causal relationship between the amount of homework and students' performance. The author assume that do homework is the only facter to reflect students' performance. It is the fact that quality of education is not equal to score of examination. By decreasing homework, students could get more available time to develop their own interests, which cannot be assessed through an exam. In this case, it appears reasonable that Sanlee's students improve their comprehensive abilities while Marlee's students just get a high mark.

lukebrehm · 发表于 2012-1-29 21:05:38

I'd say a large percentage of your mistakes have to do with when to make something singular and when to make it plural. So I'm going to give you something to read and hope it helps.

Good job on your essay and good luck

lukebrehm · 发表于 2012-1-29 21:09:32

without the definite article	with the definite article
general words (indefinite)	general words (definite)
Life is too short. I like flowers.	I've read a book on the life of Bill Clinton. I like the flowers in your garden.
names of persons on the singular, relatives	family names in the plural
Peter and John live in London. Aunt Mary lives in Los Angeles.	The Smiths live in Chicago.
public buildings, institutions, means of transport (indefinite)	public buildings, institutions, means of transport (definite)
Mandy doesn't like school. We go to school by bus. Some people go to church on Sundays.	The school that Mandy goes to is old. The bus to Dresden leaves at 7.40. The round church in Klingenthal is famous.
names of countries in the singular; summits of mountains; continents; towns	names of countries in the plural; mountain ranges; regions
Germany, France; Mount Whitney, Mount McKinley; Africa, Europe; Cairo, New York	the United States of America, the Netherlands; the Highlands, the Rocky Mountains, the Alps; the Middle East, the west of Australia
single islands	groups of islands
Corfu, Bermuda, Sicily	the Bahamas, the British Isles, the Canaries
parks; lakes; streets	name with of-phrase; oceans; seas; rivers
Central Park, Hyde Park; Lake Michigan, Loch Ness; 42nd Street, Oxford Street	the Statue of Liberty, the Tower (of London), the Isle of Wight; the Atlantic (Ocean); the Mediterranean (Sea); the Nile, the Rhine, the Suez Canal
months, days of the week (indefinite)	months, days of the week (definite)
The weekend is over on Monday morning. July and August are the most popular months for holidays.	I always remember the Monday when I had an accident. The August of 2001 was hot and dry.

jm444862668 · 发表于 2012-1-31 14:04:31

谢谢!实在不好意思,我以后一定会注意的!!!

[argument] 【求狂拍】Topic135 老师布置作业那篇……算是第一篇完整的argument了吧

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