作文三分：写作能力 or 模板

     作文三分，不大爽，AA 用七宗罪的模板，略作修改，考试的时候三条罪全部看出，每条罪都有引用例子，只是一直在担心时间，例子就一句话带过，没有展开，有400多字，检查4分钟；AI 的用的山峰那个的头段，后面整合了别的模板，写的时候比较拘束，也没怎么展开，大概写了350，最后还剩6分钟狂检查错误。因为自己知道文采不行，所以特别注意结构，需用连词的地方一定用，段落都是五段式的。本想4分应该差不多吧，结果,哎。。。

附上模板，TX帮忙分析分析

AI：

The issue at hand, whether the government is responsible for providing healthcare, is a very controversial. To some extent, I agree with the author’s assertion [allegation] that……. However, the author unnecessarily extends this broad assertion to an irreversible extreme while neglecting some other crucial factors which may significantly influence the issue. Therefore, the final judgment should depend on a careful case-by-case analysis. All in all, my contention and agreement with the author is based on the subsequent grounds and consideration. 

The paramount reason for my standpoint is that …… thus undermining the author’s assertion that…… A good example can be easily found is that…… Under such circumstance [   ], therefore, it is obvious [self-evident] that……

Another equivalently crucial ground that would develop my viewpoint is that…….. To illustrate, let us consider that …… moreover,……  Consequently [Hence]

Admittedly, it may be true that …… in some special conditions. However, this alone does not constitute sufficient evidence to claim [    ] that …… , furthermore, these cases are rare and therefore are not general and persuasive enough to strengthen [buttress] the view [   ] that …… When the advantages and disadvantages are carefully examined, the most striking [salient] conclusion is obvious that …… [is obvious]

In the final analysis [in sum],  basing [  ]on the illustrations and expositions mentioned above, which correlate with each other to generate an organic whole, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that… 

"AI 的用的山峰那个的头段"

。。这就是原因。。

lz可以去awa区参考那个作文2分的帖子。

我觉得这些句子违背了SC宗旨 - have used 2/3 words when 1 would do

太啰嗦了？

考前我跟一个考了三次的都是5分的人要了个模板，也是这个样子的。。。