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这样的大概能拿几分?

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楼主
发表于 2008-4-28 17:24:00 | 只看该作者

这样的大概能拿几分?

多谢!

题目是 为了成功,是需要周详的计划还是需要冒险

When we read the biography of successful people, we could always go through some stories that they took adventures and risks and finally turn out to be successful. In my opinion, taking risks at some critical decision point is important for people to be successful, but, the importance of careful planning should not be ignored. Being brave and entrepreneur is not conflict with being well-planned and thinking over thoroughly.

 

 In my opinion, in order to be successful, a careful planning is a must. For example, if you want to start up your own business, you need to do much research before you taking actions. You need to do analysis on the market as well as an internal analysis on your business model, your capabilities, skills and knowledge to see how is the chance to be successful if your business model goes live and face the real market. In addition, the plan should also includes some financial analysis to see whether it is economical feasible. That is to say, a careful planning will help people to know their strength and weakness, thus helping people to take full advantage of their strength and to see how could improve. The process of a careful plan will be a useful tool to identify problems and maximize the possibilities to be successful.

 

In addition to a careful planning, the brave and wisdom to taking adventures or risks are also critical in being successful. It is crucial in most situations. Let us take back the example of starting up business. The market changes fast, sometimes, it is not clear what will happen in the future. If people hesitate a bit and being slow in action, they will lose the business opportunities. In order to grasp the opportunity, taking risks is a must here.

 

On the whole, I think having a careful plan and taking risks are all important in being successful. People should learn to balance on this.  A careful plan plus taking risks, making right decisions at some critical point will help people to be successful.


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沙发
发表于 2008-4-28 17:41:00 | 只看该作者
it is ok, but it is better to definitely choose one option - plan or risk rather a position in both, then demonstrate your primary points and sub-p points and exmples.
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2008-4-28 19:28:00 | 只看该作者

多谢!

是不是一般都会赞成某一种观点的?写2个都重要不是很好,现在作文是人批的还是机器批的呢?

多谢!

地板
发表于 2008-4-28 20:32:00 | 只看该作者

都是人批啊~~~

一般俩个人批,得出的分数除二。如果差值大的话就得交给第三个比较狠的人再批

5#
发表于 2008-4-29 12:34:00 | 只看该作者
词汇级数很低,譬如一个successful就用了不下七八次
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