TWE001 第一次写，请大家指教，不胜感激

      When most of the students graduate from high school, they confront two choice: to study further in university or to find a piece of job. There are a lot of reasons why people need a job right away, for example: need money urgently, feed up study etc. But I think at least following facts are main reasons for people who wants to receive university education.

      Above all, the anxiety to receive more knowledge pushes people to enter the university. Although people usually have spent 12 years in the school until they finish high school, most of the knowledge taught was intro level. For example If you ask a high school student what matrix is, some of them may know little about it but most of them even never heard of it. They are not innocent neither not to study hard. People begin to learn math since they were 6, most of them just learn how to calculate numbers, triangles and other simple things before go to university. Further more, universities provide student not only advanced knowledge but also practice. Besides learning knowledge from class, students have to attend different project working with what they have learned. By practicing, they get both abstract ideas and concrete experience.

     Beside advanced knowledge, the possibility to find a piece of good job is one more important thing. Most of the companies prefer people has better education ground as they consider education is a key factor of one person's ability. This is not true but it does exist when you trying to apply for a job. Even people doing the same job with different education background, their salary can be different. In some company, especially Japanese companies, when people join the company they can receive special allowance according to their degree.

      Still people may go to university because it help you to enhance your social relationship. As known, there are alumni in each university. To join the university you access not only the knowledge the university has but also the strong social relationship the school's alumni has. Like Harvard and Stanford their student are active in every field you can find.

      Study in university is one of the most important and exciting thing in one's life. People can learn knowledge, enhance both academic and social skills, then find a good job. To start ones career live, university is the best start.

 大家给个意见啊，写的就这么差么？都没有人回复，给点建议啊

总体写的还是很不错的，但是有几个单复数似乎有点问题。

第二段，我把逻辑给稍微改了一下，可能会更好。

我说的也不一定对，LZ看看有没有可 借鉴的吧

非常谢谢八爪鱼。挂了这么久都有点放弃了

我也觉得我自己老犯单复数的问题。

      Above all(this is more likely used in a conclusion), the anxiety to receive(try to use a verb to show students' activeness. like obtain, get, acquire) more knowledge pushes people to enter(x) the university. Although people usually have spent 12 years in the school until they finish high school(the writing might have been more efficient: although students usually spend 6 years in high school, most of the knowledge taught was intro level(if i were you, i will keep the subject people, and adapt the sentence to 'they mostly get an introduction level of knowledge). For example If you ask a high school student what matrix is, some of them may know little about it but most of them even never heard of it (a more efficient way of description is: for example, a high school student may not know the concept of matrix.). They are not innocent neither not to study hard(plz make sense.).
    (you need to add some transition words here, like, In addition, )People begin to learn math since they were 6, most of them just learn how to calculate numbers, triangles and other simple things before go to university(you'd better bring your point outright in this sentence, like: although studnets learn math since the age of 6, most of them just know basics such as numeric calculation and plane geometry).