[求助][推荐]关于TAsk2的策略

关于第二题的模板  Although some people prefer...........,because...........................,however, i would love to ...............................  There are several reasons for this...First of all,.............................Besides,..............................Finallly,..................................In these reasons,i prefer to.........................
我的问题是  : 我的连接词这样用可以吗     还有什么需要改善的地方吗             请大家帮忙解答下