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下面是我今天做test1完成的练习，大家帮忙看看，修改一下好么~~我也很愿意帮大家改文章啊，贴上来就好咯~~

integrated writing

Tourism has a very long history. The early tourisms were mainly for political and economic reasons such as conquering other civilizations and establishing colonies. The reading material mentions the Vikings travel. In the listening material we learned it is really a influential adventure. They hunted wild animals and explore the resources.

At present, tourism has become a sport but not the conquest of native people. And it really promote the personal growth.

There are several types of tourism. One type is ethnic tourism. People try to research the society, art and ceremonies of some societies which are usually the endanger ones. Unless effective protection the costumes and culture of such societies might be lost.

Another type of tourism is the environment tourism. The tourists’ purpose is to observe and learn the region. Let’s induce the tours in Africa as an example. Nowadays, the people go to Africa for scientific, cultural and educational purpose but not for colonies.

 independent writing

 independent writing

Children are the future of the world. Whether they are healthy and develop fully are the key to the world’s fate. While nowadays the child of each family is paid a lot of attentions of the parents with a stainless kind heart. Therefore, subjects that children taken in education is a vital thing to consider. I wholehearted support the statement that subjects such as art, music and drama should be a essential part of every child’s basic education.

Foremost, art, music and drama are the essence of human’s civilization that it is the responsibility for every person to learn it even not a expert in the fields. in the long river of human’s development, art, music and drama are the symbol of human’s development. It is well known that what sets humans and animals apart are the language. As I see it, art, music and drama are also the distinctive characteristic of humans, because they are the ways people express themselves and show their emotions as gladness and sadness. What’s more, art, music and drama are gorgeous. Among all other realms of civilization, we won’t go to far to say that they are the most fantastic. All in all, we don’t bother more to argue the significance of art, music and drama. As I see it, for every one living in the world, he/she should get the education of them. It is impossible to make every one be a expert but getting some knowledge of them is a must.

In addition, art, music and drama promote children’s development a lot. Every child want to be intelligent and by learn these subjects, children will be smarter as art, music and drama are not easy. To understand the theme and core of a work, to learn the play of a piece of instrument and to study to perform in a drama, children must think carefully and just in the process of these activities, their brain and at the same time the body is getting exercise. Furthermore, in the learning of art, music and drama children’s taste for life is developed and a high-level taste is very good for the children to have a more enjoyable life.

In conclusion, although some people states that the knowledge of art, music and drama are not that useful as that in physics, mathematics and language, however, for the children’s long-term growth and development, each child should have the chance to learn art, music and drama.

wish u could take advantage of my ideas. i don't list the cons since i think pro is easier to write. anyway, there are plentiful instances/reasons to support yr argumentation. as to the construction, yrs is good.

have fun!

Pros:

1.       Creativity:

a.       chance to use you emotions, imaginations to create something original

b.       express oneself ex. Paint a picture how you see the world

c.       understand yourself better

d.       from play, help yourself understand the social relationship among people

e.       emotional release: music, express happiness/express thought; through arts

 例子: leonardo de vinci;

2.       improve intelligence:

a.       when engage in the arts such as drama can learn to understand human nature letter

b.       psychology; will; understand English literature, world history, politic letters

c.       to more you use your brain the more you will learn: memorize lines in a play—can improve memorize mathematical formula;

d.       relationship between intelligence and the arts: Winston Churchill- a great politician and a good painter; Albert Einstein, a eminent physicist well as an accomplished violinist

e.       draw a painting, learn logical orders for computer

   albert einstein;

3.       pleasure:

a.       have fun: be with orchestra, group of players, group of painters : create with a group ; learn from them n a creative setting

b.       socializing: common interesting, group setting

c.       moral boasting for individual and school: may keep students in school

4.       social safety:

a.       keep teenagers in groups with common interesting

b.       decrease youngsters in the streets

Cons:

Children are the future of the world. Whether they are healthy and develop fully are the key to the world’s fate. (能理解意思,有点不习惯.不知道毛病,但是表达很不地道.)While nowadays the child of each family is paid a lot of attentions of the parents with a stainless kind heart(RUN-ON, NOT A SENTENCE, NOT COMPLETED). Therefore, subjects that children taken in education is a vital thing to consider. I wholehearted support the statement that subjects such as art, music and drama should be a essential part of every child’s basic education.

没有什么大问题,不过需要FINETUNED. 我把第一段重新写一下,根据你想表达的意思.YETEMWOI[在] yahoo.CA)

The tomorrow of our society largely relies on the children today. Nowadays, many families have been paying as much as possible attention to the education of their children, escorting their kids to and from schools and grasping any opportunity that might be beneficial to the holistic development of the children. On the other hand, children will, sometimes have to, work on many subjects such as natural science, music, and painting. Should children take such possilbly burdensome studies? Or what benefits would such educational approaches bring about for the future of children? In my opinion, ......