我的2篇作文，大家看看（让你们鸡蛋的风暴再猛烈一点吧，谢谢）

你可以先参考该版置顶的帖子里边的修改集合

然后我在iBT区有一个写作的帖子，你也可以参考一下

然后发现自己的一些问题，进行修改过后再发上来

我进行具体的修改

修改过的，德在帮我改改吧  TOPIC：你觉得组织重要么，Do you think organization is important to people

It is generally accepted that today is an epoch belonging to innovation, there is a distinct tendency that society requires people on all sides, Not only should you be creative, but also you should be able to speak several foreign languages. The phenomenon that people are buried with all kinds of knowledge is what we call Knowledge Explosion. As a result, people who are overwhelmed with books suffer from great stress. If you are not willing to give up your social life, Setting up an organization or group seems to be a wise choice.

Advantages can be seen from it clearly when a team is dealing with a project requesting creation and passion. As each individual is diverse from other, there is a higher chance for a team to come up with a fantastic and creative idea, which is considered as an indispensable factor in contemporary society, What is more, the team leader could serve as an inspirer whose aim is to both manage the team and hold each one into a continuum. Another reason is that when a team, unfortunately, fails in a certain project, it is the whole team that get criticized instead of someone, in that way, the passion of a team member for a better goal would not get chilled. Oppositely, the organization will probably start to realize that what they have done is not good enough, not to complain about the pickiness of the supervisor.

The pleasure after a success is also amplified in a team. As the saying goes:” once you share your sorrow with a person, it becomes half, as to happiness, it doubles.” The joy when finishing a huge task in a team is beyond words. Since everyone becomes a super star in the field at which they are quite good. Unlike a single person, he has to handle plenty of situations where he doesn’t have a clue.

Undeniably, it would be really tricky to deal with the relationships among members in a team since everyone is so different in characteristic and the principal of their own. The leader may be doubted or even insulted at his back and the people working for him always complain about the working environment such as salary or welfare, sometimes they will consider themselves superior to others in the team, therefore they don’t cooperate and treat themselves as those who have no business with the task. However, such problems can be solved if there is a qualified leader, he may cool the collision and reset the trust and friendship in the team. So, as far as I am concerned, I think organization is essential to everyone who wants to make a different.

so, where is the topic?

已经写上了，具体的我也不记得了，大概就是那个意思