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楼主
发表于 2006-10-5 20:40:00 | 只看该作者

[求助]作文

试着写了一篇作文,感觉磕磕巴巴的,可是又不太知道怎么改,还请大家给些建议,十分感谢了 :-)

69 If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose?

 

Knowledge of both natural and social science is useful to me. When I meet a problem which need complex data analysis, operation research will give me a lot of help. When I read a novel, the knowledge of history and culture will let me get a clearer comprehension of the work. If now there is an opportunity for me to study another subject, I would like to study psychology, which can let me keep away from depression, live happier, and feel more comfortable to communicate with others.

Psychology is a kind of science about human, their thinking, and action. One of Psychology’s research fields is to study the depression. I am quite interested in it, because during the study I can not only make sense of the cause of the depression but also learn some methods to weaken the negative effect. So, after the study it will be easier for me to control my emotion, since I know how to change my attitude to a positive way which is far from depression. With a happier emotion, it will be easier to cope with daily life. Though there may be a lot of things have to be done, all of these will not turn into large pressure, which is hard to bear.

Psychology can also teach me how to deal with people’s relationship. No one is living in the world alone. In other words, he has to work in the society in order to live. Talking with others is the most common way to communicate with others. If we want to get more information or help from others, we need to know how to make an effect communication. Through the course of psychology, the knowledge about the way people think will be a great help to the communication. We will know more about how to use words and sentences to make the expression appropriately. It can also make us take more care about others, which is helpful to eliminate confliction.

沙发
发表于 2006-10-5 21:51:00 | 只看该作者

好像字数少了点,还可以再一个例子。

另外,楼主的句子好像较长,长句子应该不影响考试,但最好加一些起承转合的连接词,可以让文章看上去有层次感。

板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2006-10-6 10:20:00 | 只看该作者

好的,谢谢,会注意下下。

举例的时候总不大会把握例子的长短,太长或太短,不知有什么好的方法

地板
发表于 2006-10-6 12:00:00 | 只看该作者

字数太少了啊 !

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 楼主| 发表于 2006-10-6 12:05:00 | 只看该作者

? 不是三百字以上就可以了吗?

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