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170 Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’ lives. Different people hold different opinions due to their distinct backgrounds.Cosidering my experience and personality ,I would like to say we should try our best to take part of all kinds of groups or organizations.There are many persuasive reasons why I said like that. And I will explore a few of important reasons and provide some concrete evidence to support my viewpoits as follows.

First of  all, the reason that can be presented to develop my position is that we can get more information in groups or organizations. As we know, information makes us learn about what is going on around us and bring us confidence .For example, when we join a club for  tennis, we can learn some skills and some rules from the coach there. Without question,we can enjoy the match for the tennis after we possess the relative information.Furthermore , .”wisdom in the mind is better than money in the hand”how often we heare such words like there.In this instance, it is obvious that information we gain from groups or organizations is very important for us.

In the second place, another convincing reason is that we can help others. It is attending groups or organizations that make us have  more chance to give a hand to others. In fact ,you can get more help if you give  help to others.One of the greatest early writers said”all for one ,one for all “without a heart to help others ,we would get little when we have some difficulties.Hence, another equally important aspect is that we should do our best to give a hand to others in groups or organization.

In addtion ,what is also worth noticing is that we can make friends.For instance, when we are taking a training course ,the purpose is to learn to play the piano in groups ,at the same time we meet many different people there.Certainly we also find the persons who have a common interest with us. Outside the groups ,we may make frinds with these persons.Taking into account of this reason, we will easily find that groups or organizations not only bring us information but also make us make many friends.

To sum up ,due to the reasons mentioned above, I can safely and wisely reach the conclusion that groups or organization is an important part of some people’s lives.

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总体不错，4.5左右，搂主喜欢用万用句式，背过一些万能作文，受填空作文影响比较大。有的比较牵强

Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’ lives. Different people hold different opinions due to their distinct backgrounds.（汗，你以为这是个万能句，这个题目的观点已经确定，就不用这句）Considering my experience and personality ,I would like to say we should try our best to take part of all kinds of groups or organizations.There are many persuasive reasons why I said like that. (这句和上句有重复阿，省点)And I will explore a few （of 不要 ） important reasons and provide some concrete evidences to support my (viewpoints) as follows.

First of  all, the reason that can be presented to develop my position is that we can get more information in groups or organizations (此句最好改成the reason why……is that..). As we (all )know, information makes us learn about what is going on around us and bring us confidence .For example, when we join a club for  tennis, we can learn some skills and some rules from the coach there. Without question, we can enjoy the match (foràof) the tennis after we possess the relative information. Furthermore , .”wisdom in the mind is better than money in the hand” (好像关系不大，还是不要用好，个人建议)how often we heare such words like there.In this instance, it is obvious that information we gain from groups or organizations is very important for us.