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wj37044

promp: some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. others believe that success ruslts from careful planning.

Up till now human society has experienced variety of phase, from early stage such as Paleolithic

and neolithc period to recent modern stage such as industrial and technological epoch so that

the society becomes more and more sophisticated and composes of different and enormous element, which means to offer people a grater amount of opportunity to succeed. Previously due to shortage of mediums for communication between people, there was limited way to achieve success and most possible way recognized by ancient people was to work hard plus careful planning, while currently various kinds of inventions come into face and in turn people are able to rely on such computer telegraph and telecommunication to accomplish their goal with less relative effort compared with archaic times. Hence from current perspective, I think success is likely to be realized by taking risk or chance.

 

As my saying above, ancient economic was not very flourish like today and mainly belonged to local or national economy. trade between country and countries was pretty rare. Of course, people always choose the traditional way to realize their goal by studying hard and planning carefully on their academy as well as furthermore acquiring such high score in national organized

test that they would be recruited in royal court, which is common method utilized by our ancestors not suitable for our generation.

 

Currently, with the advent of new technology, human society advances more quickly than we anticipated Internet, e-banking, prosperous capital market and various international organization are formed all of which are based on computer, telegraph and so on. In the mean time this revolution brings us more chance to earn the money immediately and make success. For instance, such modern capital markets as stock and future are saturated with opportunity all the time,

if someone has some financial and economic sense. Every day, there is new millionaires borned through the way of investment of any type of stock or future option. If the capital market is ebullient, almost every investor is capable of become millionaire through one night. There is well known saying that in bull stock market, it's much better to invest in stock than work hard in company. Another persuasive example is that children who simply inherited business from their parents are also likely to achieve same success because the parents have already founded solid base for them.

 

In closing, as the society progresses dramatically, there is tremendous opportunities which are waiting for you to recognize for success whether you are young or older only if you have clairvoyance and perspicacious ness. Although this kind of success is too easy for people to cherish or is meteoritic, it is true success as same as that obtained by careful planning.

wasjb_123

are u dumb? ass f*ck?  ehm?   VANISH!

xiaoxiong123

我不是牛人，就是给一点初步的意见

第一段没看懂要说什么， 是不是有点跑题阿

As my
                saying (应该用I said，saying 指谚语) above, ancient economic(经济的， 啥意思不懂) was not very flourish like today ( as flourish as today) and mainly belonged to local or national economy (古代经济的属于经济？实在不懂这句话啥意思啊). trade between country and countries(这个怎么用了两个country)was pretty(可以这么用么) rare. Of course(最好以后都别用这个词, 这里用and 就可以), people always (usually) choose the traditional way to realize (achieve) their goals in that days, such as study hard and plan carefully
                on their academy tests(plan on academy? 啥意思阿)
                as well as furthermore (把furthermore去了吧) acquiring such high score in national organized

test so that they would be recruited in (assigned to )royal court, which is common method utilized by our ancestors （前面说了always choose了，这里不用重复）not suitable for our generation（us）.