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Admittedly, in the past a son always should have similar job with his father, whatever peasant, doctor, officer or merchant. However, attribute to a fair community condition, we obtain more chance to chase our dream with great possibility. Thus, we should try our best to follow our own mind to start our career, the same opportunity should also be given to our children.
First of all, as everyone today has obvious(unique或者distinguished会不会比较好?) personality, people mostly intend to achieve their own goals, which bring them a sense of achievement. To myself, I would like to be a programmer of(with怎么样?) great computer skills because when I was young, I always spend time playing online games and I was eager to find out the principle of how game runs so I show an interest in code.(这段逻辑关系有点乱, 可以这样: I show an interest in code even when I was young. Back then, I always...)In contrary(总感觉however比较好), my father want me to be a accountant that he studied accounting in the college 20 years ago(可以换成 which he majored in college 20 years ago)since nowadays accounting mayor graduates are easy to find out(find即可 或者可用 attain; gain)a job in the world(labor market). Finally he compressed(妥协compromised) and allowed me to study computer science. If I were studying accounting, I would also make an achievement; after all(Nevertheless比较好), it's not my own wills so I would regret I didn’t follow my dream(可用heart 跟之前的wills对应).Base(Based) on the example(experience) above, my son will freely choose a job he wants.
Secondly, there is no doubt that without parents' protection, a fresh man would face more challenges and difficulties. On one hand, if my son has the similar jobs with me, he would be protecting(protected) well and a practiced father-like guide to success(这句有点乱阿...). On the other hand, after overcome difficulties, he learns much more than growing under my protection, (such as)confidence, responsibility, patience and courage. A decent job can only teach him to be a obedient employee rather than a boss. Also, by choosing a job differed of(different from) mine, he can open eyes and widen his field(可用widen his horizon), associate friends from diverse region; it can enrich his experience and result in a happy life.
All in all, my children's life (is) defined by themselves, what I gave(give) just only a warm family as well as a good education. When they grow up, I have to let them fly by their own wings, I desire they become eagles, flying above blue sky, succeed with great honor in their field, nor(rather than) still a baby bird in the nest. Choosing a job by themselves not only is a way to their own success but (is) a responsibility as a father.
LZ结构不是很清晰哎 感觉不是很有说服力的样子 写之前先123的列出个提纲吧 然后有的词用的不是很合适感觉 |
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