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晨依Jacqueline

TPO5 综合写作
In the reading, three hypothesis are raised to explain the use of the Chaco Canyon house. Unfortunately, none of these three is considered as convincing, according to the professor.

In the first place, when it comes to the residential use, the professor comes up with an idea that there is not enough fireplaces for the residents doing their daily cooking in the great canyon to live though it may look big in appearance. The professor takes an example to argue that even in the largest house there only exists fireplaces which could afford ten families to live instead of hundreds residents. What's more, there are insufficient rooms in the great house. Hence, what the reading predicts isn't the primary function of the house.

Second, the lecturer also holds a conflicting view with the theory that the Chaco great houses are used for storing food and grains. Although the large empty rooms seem to be possible for storing maize, but As the lecturer claims, the inside house contradicts that hypothesis because there is neither split crops remained on the floor nor containers to store the grains. So the second theory is not supported by evidence, either.

In the end, a third theory is mentioned in the passage that the great house is used as ceremonial centers. However, the speaker says that doesn't hold water. Besides the broken pots remained in the mount Pueblo Alto, there are large quantities of other materials for building, such as sands, stones and even construction tools. The fact, say the speaker, is that all these materials piled in the mountain are nothing but trash. To conclude, the ceremonial theory is not real.

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In the reading,three hypothesis are raised to explain the use of the Chaco Canyon house. Unfortunately, none of these three is considered as(我记得GMAT语法consider 后面加as是错误的表达..) convincing, according to the professor.

In the first place, when it comes to the residential use, the professor comes up with an idea that there is(are) not enough fireplaces for the residents doing their daily cooking in the great canyon to live though it(这里指代fireplaces应该用they) may look big in appearance. The professor takes an example to argue that even in the largest house there only exists(exist) fireplaces which could afford ten families to live instead of hundreds residents. What's more, there are insufficient rooms in the great house. Hence, what the reading predicts isn't the primary function of the house.

Second, the lecturer also holds a conflicting view with the theory that the Chaco great houses are used for storing food and grains. Although the large empty rooms seem to be possible for storing maize, but(although,but不能同时出现,去掉其一) As(as) the lecturer claims, the inside house contradicts that hypothesis because there is(are) neither split crops remained on the floor nor containers to store the grains. So the second theory is not supported by evidence, either.

In the end, a third theory is mentioned in the passage that the great house is used as ceremonial centers. However, the speaker says that doesn't hold water. Besides the broken pots remained in the mount Pueblo Alto, there are large quantities of other materials for building, such as sands, stones and even construction tools. The fact, say(says) the speaker, is that all these materials piled in the mountain are nothing but trash. To conclude, the ceremonial theory is not real.

conclusion: 听力听得很全，几乎细节都有涵盖。表达流畅。
                   个别主谓一致的错误要注意。

第一次改有不足请多包涵，嘿嘿

晨依Jacqueline

谢谢sang~木有考过G的孩纸伤不起呀~~以前还经常用consider as呢，以后注意避免。非常感谢~

超级无敌小鹤鹤

谢谢sang~木有考过G的孩纸伤不起呀~~以前还经常用consider as呢，以后注意避免。非常感谢~

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/5/5 10:48:38)

哈哈 其实很多GMAT语法考试的时候不可以的东西TOEFL还是可以的~~~G的语法太太太正式额。。。。。

晨依Jacqueline

谢谢sang~木有考过G的孩纸伤不起呀~~以前还经常用consider as呢，以后注意避免。非常感谢~

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/5/5 10:48:38)

哈哈 其实很多GMAT语法考试的时候不可以的东西TOEFL还是可以的~~~G的语法太太太正式额。。。。。

-- by 会员 超级无敌小鹤鹤 (2012/5/5 11:11:13)

欢迎鹤鹤视察~撒花！嘻嘻语法部分晨依实在是差的不行，都收着啦，当给G打基础吧！
以后G的问题还要骚扰小鹤鹤，做好心理准备哇~~O(∩_∩)O

超级无敌小鹤鹤

谢谢sang~木有考过G的孩纸伤不起呀~~以前还经常用consider as呢，以后注意避免。非常感谢~

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/5/5 10:48:38)

哈哈 其实很多GMAT语法考试的时候不可以的东西TOEFL还是可以的~~~G的语法太太太正式额。。。。。

-- by 会员 超级无敌小鹤鹤 (2012/5/5 11:11:13)

欢迎鹤鹤视察~撒花！嘻嘻语法部分晨依实在是差的不行，都收着啦，当给G打基础吧！
以后G的问题还要骚扰小鹤鹤，做好心理准备哇~~O(∩_∩)O

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/5/5 19:43:20)

晨依Jacqueline

5月5日 独立写作
不好意思发的太晚了，抱歉哇。
今天发现原来我计时也是可以写到400+的，打字速度比原来快了呀~~
As we all know that parents are children's first and best teachers. However, how to be a good teacher and educate children properly has become a troublesome issue to many of the parents. Just take one topic, for example, should parents help their children do their work or encourage their children to do the work on their own? From my point of view, the better answer is the latter option.

To begin with, it is essential for parents to encourage their children to manage their work by themselves because children may benefit a lot from it. That is to say, by working out a difficult question, a child is able to acquire various abilities such as analyzing data, gathering information and so on. To a very large extent can children improve their capabilities of settling problems in many aspects in their future study. On the contrary, suppose a child has the hard problem solved with the help of his parents, he will again be unable to work out similar problems by his own or even losing his independent thinking ability, which is crucial to a child's mental development.

In addition, the encouragement from parents to ask children doing their school work on their own is an initial element of chidlren's growth. Not only will this encouragement broaden children's horizons but it may also inspire children's creativity. For instance, Watt was criticized by his auntie as a lazy boy when he was discovering the mystery of steam power, and this discouragement really depressed the child's learning activity. Fortunately, he was encouraged by his father to do research on this new discovery and finally succeeded in inventing the steam engine, which pushed the world first industrial revolution. From Watt's case, we can obviously draw a conclusion that parents have the responsibility to encourage their children working on their own and find something new instead of doing all things for them.

Admittedly, parents sometimes could give their children useful advice when they are dealing with dilemma because they are more mature and experienced. However, several "golden rules" are now out-of-date and could not well solve the current questions. To demonstrate this, I will discusse(discuss) my real experience. Once my mother helped me overcomed(overcome) a very hard problem using her knowledge, but it was proved totally wrong by my teacher and this did disappointed me. From then on, my mother has realized that she ought to encourage me to work out the difficult problems rather than finishing the assignments by her effort. Hence, to help children doing their works sometimes could even hurt their feelings.

To sum, it is better for parents to instruct their children doing their work own their own rather than working out the difficulties in place of them. Under this instructions, I firmly believe that parents could educate their children more excellently and provide great help to their children in their growth.

晨依Jacqueline

TPO7 每次都是第二天才把前一天的补完，罪过……呜~~
Whether the certifications of high ecological standards could attract more customers for American wood companies, is the key issue discussed by both the writer and the speaker. While the reading says no, the listening material prefers an affirmative answer.

In the first place, as the author claims, heavy exposed to too much advertisements, consumers in the United States will treat the wood with ecocertification the same as other products. However, the lecturer disputes that wood products, especially those own independent certification, will win more favor by customers because they tend to have confidence in such certification agencies. Hence, the lecturer refutes what the author states, indicating that with the international certification, the wood products will attract more customers.

True, the customers in the United States care much about the price of products, admitted in the speech. But when there is a small difference in prices , for instance, when the distinct is less than 5%, people will definitely take other factors into consideration. Fortunately, the price difference between the certificated wood products and the uncertificated wood products are right in this range. So, opposed to what is indicated in the passage, consumers are willing to value this certificated wood products because of their sense of environmental protection.

Ultimately, according to the professor, the real problem is not about the foreign companies but the foreign competitions. A serious consequence will emerge if the American wood companies did not catch up with the foreign companies applying the certifications. That is, American wood companies will slowly capture the share in the market and constantly lose a large number of their customers in the end. This viewpoint is again opposite to what is demonstrated in the reading.

超级无敌小鹤鹤

哇哈哈~~ 大家来找茬啊来找茬~~

Whether the certifications of high ecological standards could attract more customers for American wood companies,(去掉，小晨依怎么放了这么一个可爱滴错误~~hiahia！) is the key issue discussed by both the writer and the speaker. While the reading says no, the listening material prefers an affirmative answer.

In the first place, as the author claims, heavy exposed to too much advertisements, consumers in the United States will treat the wood with ecocertification the same as other products.(这句话语法上没有问题，不过由于in the..., as the..., heavy exposed to...的存在，导致整个句子有点头重脚轻，不放稍作调整，eg.In the first place, the author claims that consumers in the United States will treat the wood with ecocertification the same as other products as the result of  heavy exposed to too much advertisements) However, the lecturer disputes that wood products, especially those own independent certification, will win more favor by customers because they tend to have confidence in such certification agencies. Hence, the lecturer refutes what the author states, indicating that with the international certification, (去掉逗号，不然indicating作为插入语，则后面the wood什么的就不知道在干啥了)the wood products will attract more customers.

True(这儿好像太口语化了点哟~~), the customers in the United States care much about the price of products, admitted in the speech. But when there is a small difference in prices , for instance, when the distinct is less than 5%, people will definitely take other factors into consideration. Fortunately, the price difference between the certificated wood products and the uncertificated wood products are right in this range. So, opposed to what is indicated in the passage, the professor mentions that(这儿需要考虑opposed的逻辑主语哈~~~是professor不是consumers啊~~~) consumers are willing to value this certificated wood products because of their sense of environmental protection.

Ultimately, according to the professor, the real problem is not about the foreign companies butabout(not but并列，not后面有about，所以but后面也要不出about) the foreign competitions. A serious consequence will emerge if the American wood companies did(虚拟语气咩？我觉得用个can就好了~~~) not catch up with the foreign companies applying the certifications. That is, American wood companies will slowly capture the share in the market and constantly lose a large number of their customers in the end. This viewpoint is again opposite to what is demonstrated in the reading.

嗯，总的来说对于阅读和听力的细节都把握的很到位啦~~ 如果小晨依能够在细节上更加的推敲一下，觉得是完美无缺啦~~~

晨依Jacqueline

哇哈哈~~ 大家来找茬啊来找茬~~

-- by 会员 超级无敌小鹤鹤 (2012/5/7 20:24:39)

小鹤鹤你越来越二了……