TWE168 那位大侠帮帮我，看看这能得多少分，实在没有底。

ahnam

本人水平低，请大虾指教，不胜感激！！！

Some Students desire to finish their university education in other country; others want to attend a university in their home country. Which is a better way? It is difficult to say whether they attend a university in home country or abroad is good or not.  Generally, it depends very much on your own experience and life style. You may find some people hold the idea of being a abroad meanwhile others prefer to stay at their home. However, from my point of view, I will agree that former one is more reasonable. For attending a university abroad is more advisable than staying in hometown, in the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

Gaining more experiences is the first and foremost reason that I have chosen to put forward. To illustrate this, there is an appropriate example: If you study in Italy, you can learn their culture directly. You can see historic buildings and attend their weddings. You can eat original pizza and pasta, which you can never get in your hometown. Do not you think those examples quoted above are very persuasive?

The second reason can be seen by every one that you can learn anther language. If you are bilingual you can get more opportunities to find a job. Now the world is more like a town. No country can exist without others. Like china, even a very huge country, she cannot produce all products by her own. China also need import products from other countries. To communicate with people who come from other countries, companies need more employees who can speak different languages. IF you can speak not you’re your native language but others, you will definitely benefit a lot from it.

Last but not last, you will have fun if you live in a different country such as meeting people and traveling. As far as I am concerned, studying abroad is a wise choice.

"Everything has two sides" How often we hear such words there. Although I admit that there are a couple advantages of attending a university in other countries, I still think that the disadvantages of it are apparent, such as spending more money for transportation between your home and where you are studying and feeling home sick when you are having some problems. Taking into account of all these factors and recognizing the fact, to be frank, I would like choose studying abroad as my best choice.

To sum up, given those sagacious reasons, which are discussed above, I strongly commit to notion that attending a university in other country but not in their home country.

soaring

以下是引用ahnam在2005-3-15 9:29:00的发言：

本人水平低，请大虾指教，不胜感激！！！

Some Students desire to finish their university education in other country; others want to attend a university in their home country. Which is a better way? It is difficult to say whether they attend a university in home country or abroad is good or not.  Generally, it depends very much on your own experience and life style. You may find some people hold the idea of being a abroad meanwhile others prefer to stay at their home. However, from my point of view, I will agree that former one is more reasonable. For attending a university abroad is more advisable than staying in hometown, in the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

Gaining more experiences is the first and foremost reason that I have chosen to put forward. To illustrate this, there is an appropriate example: If you study in Italy, you can learn their culture directly. You can see historic buildings and attend their weddings. You can eat original pizza and pasta, which you can never get in your hometown. Do not you think those examples quoted above are very persuasive?

The second reason can be seen by every one that you can learn anther language. If you are bilingual you can get more opportunities to find a job. Now the world is more like a town. No country can exist without others. Like china, even a very huge country, she cannot produce all products by her own. China also need import products from other countries. To communicate with people who come from other countries, companies need more employees who can speak different languages. IF you can speak not you’re your native language but others, you will definitely benefit a lot from it.

Last but not last, you will have fun if you live in a different country such as meeting people and traveling. As far as I am concerned, studying abroad is a wise choice.

"Everything has two sides" How often we hear such words there. Although I admit that there are a couple advantages of attending a university in other countries, I still think that the disadvantages of it are apparent, such as spending more money for transportation between your home and where you are studying and feeling home sick when you are having some problems. Taking into account of all these factors and recognizing the fact, to be frank, I would like choose studying abroad as my best choice.

To sum up, given those sagacious reasons, which are discussed above, I strongly commit to notion that attending a university in other country but not in their home country.

楼主麻烦你填一下标题

如：TWE001, 看得我云里雾里的

指出一点，有些画蛇添足

结构还要加强！

ahnam

168 Many students choose to attend schools or universities outside their home countries. Why do some students study abroad? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

对不起斑竹，题目在这里。 还有一个月就机考，英语底子差，不知道有什么办法提高写作？

你觉得是背新东方的范文好， 还是NCE4好呢？

还有这样的文章会不会太模版？

谢谢！！

ahnam

画蛇添足, 结构还要加强！斑竹说得很对，我刚才把这篇作文再改了一下，问题还是，1。大概能有多少分？还能怎样提高？这样的作文太模版化了吗？十分感谢！！

168 Many students choose to attend schools or universities outside their home countries. Why do some students study abroad? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

If you will attend a university, what do you like to do, to finish your education in your home country or other country? It is difficult to say which one is good or not, since different people hold different views on it not only because of their respective backgrounds but also due to their emotional concern. From my point of view, I would like to choose former one. In following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.  

In the first place, the most important reason for my view is that you can get more directly experiences and learn foreign culture more deeply. To illustrate this, there is an example: Imaging, if you study in Italy and you desire have more knowledge about European culture, is there any better way than spending 4 years in Europe? You can see how the people live, how beautiful the historic buildings are and you even can eat original pizza and pasta you have never had in your country. "You will learn more about a road by traveling it than by consulting all the maps in the world." Do not you think so?

The above is only part of the important aspect and the second argument that can be present my idea is that you can be familiar with other language. You'll definitely benefit a lot from it. Now the world is more like a town. No country can exist without others. To communicate with people who come from other countries, companies and government need more employees who can speak different languages. If you are bilingual or multilingual you can get more opportunities to find a job. As far as I concerned, going abroad is a wise choice.

"Everything has two Sides". How often we hear such words there. Although I admit that there are couple advantages of studying abroad, there is no denying that the fact the disadvantages of it are apparent.  You will spend more money in most cases, for example: paying the transportation fees and rent. You may fell hard and sometimes homesick when you have difficulty living without parents and close friend. As is known to all "no pains, no gains". Taking into account of all these factors and recognizing the fact, to be frank, I would like choose being abroad as my best choice.

To sum up, given those reasons, which are discussed above, I strongly commit going abroad to finish your university education.

brace

以下是引用ahnam在2005-3-17 3:29:00的发言：

画蛇添足, 结构还要加强！斑竹说得很对，我刚才把这篇作文再改了一下，问题还是，1。大概能有多少分？还能怎样提高？这样的作文太模版化了吗？十分感谢！！

168 Many students choose to attend schools or universities outside their home countries. Why do some students study abroad? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

If you will attend a university, what do you like to do, to finish your education in your home country or other country? It is difficult to say which one is good or not, since different people hold different views on it not only because of their respective backgrounds but also due to their emotional concern. From my point of view, I would like to choose former one. In following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.  

In the first place, the most important reason for my view is that you can get more directly experiences and learn foreign culture more deeply. To illustrate this, there is an example: Imaging, if you study in Italy and you desire have more knowledge about European culture, is there any better way than spending 4 years in Europe? You can see how the people live, how beautiful the historic buildings are and you even can eat original pizza and pasta you have never had in your country. "You will learn more about a road by traveling it than by consulting all the maps in the world." Do not you think so?

The above is only part of the important aspect and the second argument that can be present my idea is that you can be familiar with other language. You'll definitely benefit a lot from it. Now the world is more like a town. No country can exist without others. To communicate with people who come from other countries, companies and government need more employees who can speak different languages. If you are bilingual or multilingual you can get more opportunities to find a job. As far as I concerned, going abroad is a wise choice.

"Everything has two Sides". How often we hear such words there. Although I admit that there are couple advantages of studying abroad, there is no denying that the fact the disadvantages of it are apparent.  You will spend more money in most cases, for example: paying the transportation fees and rent. You may fell hard and sometimes homesick when you have difficulty living without parents and close friend. As is known to all "no pains, no gains". Taking into account of all these factors and recognizing the fact, to be frank, I would like choose being abroad as my best choice.

To sum up, given those reasons, which are discussed above, I strongly commit going abroad to finish your university education.

Personally I think  the summary is not strong enough.

Generally I think it is ok.